Results of Caribbean Kigo Kukai Number 21
(comments and votes of the players are anonymously stated)
Players: 1. Gheorghe Postelnicu , Romania; 2. Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 3. Bouwe Brouwer, The Netherlands; 4. Cara Holman, USA; 5. Margaret Dornaus, USA; 6. Etsuko Yanagibori, Japan; 7. Quentin Clingerman, USA; 8. Alegria Imperial, Phillipines; 9. George Hawkins, USA; 10. Marleen Hulst,The Netherlands; 11. Franklin Magalhaes, Rio de Janeiro; 12. Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu, Romania; 13. Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland;14. John McDonald, Scotland; 15. Catherine J.S. Lee, USA 16. Diane Mayr, USA; 17. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 18. John Daleiden; Phoenix, AZ; 19. Magdalena Dale, Romania; 20. Jacek Margolak; Poland; 21. Cezar-Florian Ciobîca;
#20 & #21 - FIRST PLACE
20
Valentine's Day...
only cup of tea
warms my hands
Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:532*** Points:17
Comment1:Though I've problems with the grammar in line two this haiku opens a fine story.
Comment2:I like a warm image
Comment3: I like this but want it more implied by dropping "only" and maybe switching lines 2 and 3.
21
late Valentine's day –
the beggar still hums
an old love song
--Cezar-Florian Ciobîca
Votes:342*** Points:17
Comments:
#19 - SECOND PLACE
Valentine’s Day…
between the book leaves
a dry flower
--Magdalena Dale - Romania
Votes:351*** Points:16
Comments:
#15 - THIRD PLACE
old valentines . . .
memories of the faces
as faded as the names
--Catherine J.S. Lee, USA
Votes:151*** Points:14
Comments:
RESULTS CONTINUES
1
sorry twin sisters -
valentine
only one
STOPSY
Votes:1***** Points:01
Comments:
2
a postcard
to renew my vows...
Valentine day
Keith A. SIMMONDS; T & T
Votes:2***** Points:02
Comments:
3
the postman
returns home empty handed
Valentine's day
--Bouwe
Votes:42**** Points:08
Comments:
4
Valentine's Day-
the queen of hearts
trumps all
--Cara Holman
Votes:32**** Points:07
Comments:vividly image
5
valentine haiku—
a chocolate-covered daisy
chain of words
Margaret Dornaus U.S.
Votes:****** Points:00
Comments:
6
corner shop
smiling buyers for bitter chocolate-
valentine
--sakuratukiyo
Votes:1***** Points:01
Comments:
7
Decorated box
Valentine placed in shyly
How many did you get?
--Que
Votes:****** Points:00
Comments:
8
Valentine card—
she smudges the hollow heart
of strawberry halves
--Alegria
Votes:*1**** Points:02
Comments: Wonderful phrasing of line 2 and 3. My interp was a young girl perhaps receiving strawberry halves as a v-day gift. The "Valentine card" of line 1 made me wonder if it was a drawing of a strawberry but since I love the idea of real strawberrys I wonder about changing line 1 to Valentine's Day.
9
my valentine...
sometimes she's not
a saint
--George Hawkins - Michigan (U.S.)
Votes:112*** Points:09
Comments:
10
Valentine’s Day dinner
the heart shaped chocolates
are on the house
--Marleen Hulst The Netherlands
Votes:2*1*** Points:05
Comments:In my head this scene turns into romance - or melancholy. Just depends, just great
11
Valentine's Day -
tracery of moths
in the antique card.
-- Franklin Magalhães; Rio de Janeiro - Brazil
Votes:4***** Points:04
Comments: I wasn't sure if these were illustrated moths or damage to the card done by moths. I'd perfer it clarified but I still like the 'ku in either case.
12
Valentine's Day -
yesterday's turtledove
sits on the same branch
--Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu, Romania
Votes:7*1*** Points:10
Comment1: I like this line. yesterday's turtledove
Comment2: Nice implied analogy.
13
Valentine's Day -
she gives me
her virginity
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:2***** Points:02
Comments:
14
the old maid -
on her mantelshelf
the years-old valentine
--John McDonald
Votes:3***** Points:03
Comments:
16
valentine's day
art teacher's closet devoid
of pinks and reds
--Diane Mayr
Votes:2***** Points:02
Comments: I like the humor and images. I think it flows better by dropping "teacher's".
17
this folded paper
the blackboard says
Valentine's Day
--Ralf
Votes:****** Points:00
Comments:
18
a valentine
for all brothers and sister--
peace in the world
--John Daleiden; Phoenix, AZ
Votes:****** Points:00
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