Caribbean Kigo #24 Kukai Results
(comments and votes of the players are anonymously stated)
Players: 1. John Daleiden, Phoenix, Arizona in the Sonoran Desert; 2. Ramona Linke, Germany; 3. Marleen Hulst, The Netherlands; 4. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 5. Alegria Imperial; Canada 6. Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 7. Gheorghe Postelnicu, Romania; 8. John McDonald, Scotland; 9.Bouwe Brouwer, The Netherlands; 10. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 11. Cara Holman, USA; 12. Jacek Margolak, Poland; 13. Diane Mayr, USA; 14. William Kenney, USA; 15. Patricia Lidia, Romania; 16. Sanjukta Asopa, Karnataka, India; 17. Catherine J.S. Lee, USA; 18. Cezar-Florian Ciobîca,Romania
#18 - FIRST PLACE
old diary -
between two blank pages
a pink ribbon
-- Cezar-Florin Ciobîca
Votes:85**** Points:18
Comments 1:It's the blankness of the pages that makes this interesting.
Comments 2: Nice image. I read it as either the ribbon was all the entry that was needed, perhaps belonging to a romantic interest or perhaps simply a bookmark with no current entry but in either case I enjoy both interps.
#14 SECOND PLACE
old oak tree
a yellow ribbon
from a different war
--BILL KENNEY
Votes:611*** Points:11
Comments:A sad commentary in so few words.
#22 THIRD PLACE
8
ribbons
floating on the breeze
Buddhist prayers
--aye John McDonald
Votes:62**** Points:10
Comment 1:Line 3 merely explains lines 1-2, but the arrangement adds some effectiveness.
Comment 2:Nice pivot line and good implied association to Buddhist prayer ribbons.
RESULTS CONTINUES
1
dusty packet
tied with red ribbons--
old love letters
--John Daleiden, Phoenix, Arizona in the Sonoran Desert
Votes:411*** Points:09
Comments:
2
Walpurgis Night ...
he loosens her hair ribbon
gingerly
--Ramona Linke, Germany
Votes:33**** Points:09
Comments:
3
wedding procession
matching ribbons
on car’s antenna’s
--Marleen Hulst, The Netherlands
Votes:2***** Points:02
Comments:Two misplaced apostrophes are two too many; no points.
4
midget's night
the white ribbon tells us
adventures
--Ralf
Votes:****** Points:00
Comments:
5
silk rain--
i tie ribbons
on my memoirs
--Alegria
Votes:3***** Points:03
Comments:"silk rain" makes this interesting, but "memoirs" introduces a note of pretension
6
cherry blossoms
blowing freely in her hair ...
a red ribbon
--Keith A. SIMMONDS T & T
Votes:3***** Points:03
Comments:
7
cherries on ears
a ribbon plaiting hair -
head ... over ears
Gh.POSTELNICU STOPS
Votes:****** Points:00
Comments:
9
a kite stuck
in the tree, it's ribbons
caught in the wind
Bouwe
Votes:12**** Points:05
Comment 1:The misplaced apostrophe removes this one from consideration. No points.
Comment 2:I like the implied that the kite/ribbons are still trying to fly/escape
10
clouds
torn to ribbons -
spring rain
--Juhani Tikkanen
Votes:5***** Points:05
Comments:There's a mismatch between lines 1-2 and line 3; the violence of "torn" doesn't sound like spring rain.
11
receding waves...
through the half-opened door
a ribbon of light
--Cara Holman
Votes:42**** Points:08
Comments:A "headline haiku" and effective as such. How effective it will be when it loses its topicality is another question.
12
sky clears up --
in the haberdasher's window
a rainbow ribbon
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:21**** Points:04
Comments:
13
love letters...
the ribbon less faded
than her memory
--Diane Mayr
Votes:71**** Points:09
Comments:Nice turn on "faded." The objection conventionally raised to metaphor in haiku doesn't apply here, because both meanings of the word are common in current usage.
15
ribbon in my hair –
one more wrinkle on cheek
and my birthday
--Patricia Lidia
Votes:1***** Points:00
Comments:
16
black ribbon-
the winding highway
up the hills
--sanjuktaa, India
Votes:6***** Points:06
Comments:
17
empty chapel
ribbons of light falling
through stained glass
--Catherine J.S. Lee, USA
Votes:5***** Points:05
Comments:
RECEIVED AFTER VOTING HAD STARTED
19
After the storm
the sun hidden behind
ribbons rainbow
--Magdalena Dale - Romania
