tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7169583481825883065.post4659520322765606308..comments2024-02-27T04:21:08.067-04:00Comments on Caribbean Kigo Kukai: CKK#11 ResultsGillena Coxhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09191865405561549074noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7169583481825883065.post-66944023732186332312010-03-29T22:09:39.670-04:002010-03-29T22:09:39.670-04:00Hi Gillena,
a mail-server problem had occured, an...Hi Gillena,<br /><br />a mail-server problem had occured, and I am still not able to receive mails sent to my old adress. Next note from me will do. Thanks for trying!<br /><br />Best wishes<br />RalfRalf Brökerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08602494065251750620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7169583481825883065.post-56637707607666759242010-03-23T11:59:39.549-04:002010-03-23T11:59:39.549-04:00COMMENTARY
ashes
on my forehead
the priest's...COMMENTARY <br /><br />ashes<br />on my forehead<br />the priest's cold thumb<br />--John McDonald; Scotland<br /><br />John took the kigo and ran with it along a religious path ; ‘ashes’ his Line One, presents a dramatic introduction to his poem; then, he reins in our interest by skillfully placing a pivot at Line Two; should we read ‘ashes on my forehead’; or should we read ‘on my forehead the priest’s cold thumb’, which is the fragment and which the phrase, he leaves that to the discretion of his reader.<br />His Line One states for us the season as well as the age old tradition with just one word and two syllables; he adds the appeal of the sense of touch in Lines Two and Three, both as feeling and warning.<br />Ashes; coming out of heat, coming out of fire, marks the penitent believer, down cold; with authority, in the person of ‘the priest’.<br />How does this quale affect the persona? What does he feel? What is he thinking? All of these questions he leaves unanswered; he prefers instead to present to us an instant as a surprise; a surprise, which he leaves for last, and introduces in Line Three ‘the priest's cold thumb’<br />But the appeal is not only to the sense of touch, the appeal to the sense of sight comes with the marking on the forehead, and the appeal to the mind in the interpretation as is set by age old traditional meanings; like the biblical hand writing on the wall, here is the thumb marking the forehead; it is time that we are cooled, before we return to the fires of life and warmth; through a process of penitence to renewal.<br />For those of us who like to count syllables, John presents his expose in ten syllables; encapsulating season, tradition, sight, touch; and engaging us in the meanings of repentance, hope and resurrection.<br />Well done John; we look forward to more of your endearing haiku.<br /><br />Thanks to all seventeen writers who made CKK11 a success.<br /><br />Links to 2 ‘ashes’ at Ash Wednesday photos<br />http://tinyurl.com/y9ft2cn<br />http://tinyurl.com/ydya46o<br /><br />---gillena cox; kukai coordinatorGillena Coxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09191865405561549074noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7169583481825883065.post-87222132690275649302010-03-21T00:30:23.571-04:002010-03-21T00:30:23.571-04:0017 writers took part in this kukai #11, however on...17 writers took part in this kukai #11, however only 16 of the seventeen sent in a ballot; I kept getting an undelivered mail response when I emailed Ralf reminders to vote; and when I visited his blog it was not up to date; so Michael Baribeau one of our CKK asterisk players was invited to submit a ballot making the number of ballots 17. <br />Special thank you to Michael.<br />I do hope Ralf will be available for CKK12<br /><br />Much love<br />gillenaGillena Coxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09191865405561549074noreply@blogger.com