Caribbean Kigo #10 Kukai Results
Players: 1. Keith Simmonds, T&T; 2. Sakuon Nakamura, Japan; 3. Jacek Margolak; Poland; 4. John MacDonald, Scotland; 5. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 6. Vasile Moldovan , Romania; 7. Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 8. Reason A. Poteet; USA; 9. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 10. Karina Klesko, USA; 11. Quentin Clingerman, USA; 12. Magdalena Dale, Poland; 13. Krzysztof Kokot; Poland; 14. Catherine J.S. Lee, Maine ; 15. Rafal Zabratynski, Poland; 16. Tomislav Maretic, Poland;
#3 FIRST PLACE
carnival in Venice -
my shadow puts on
a mask
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:4-3-4*** Points:22
Comments:The most original, least predictable haiku in this month’s Kukai.
#15 SECOND PLACE
carnival season
the condom machine
needs refilling
--Rafal Zabratynski, Poland,
Votes:6-3-2*** Points:18
Comments:this is an anti-AIDS haiku!
#4 & #7 THIRD PLACE
#4
Mardi Gras -
a little dog
wears sunglasses
--John McDonald
Votes:3-5**** Points:13
Comments
#7
carnival in Rio -
girl with a broken leg
watching the dancers
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:3-2-2*** Points:13
Comments
RESULTS CONTINUES
1
sea of revellers
in sound, colour and movement...
greatest show on Earth
--Keith A. SIMMONDS; T & T
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:
2
the floats running
through the fire
love blossoms bloom
--sakuo.
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:
5
carnival monday
the cowboy sways himself
on a clown's shoulder
--Ralf
Votes:1-1**** Points:3
Comments
6
waiting for the Lent...
the most lively colours
invade the Main Street
-- Vasile Moldovan - Romania
Votes:*1**** Points:2
Comments
8
hawker's holiday
kept afloat by Mardi Gras
deluge of doubloons
--Reason A. Poteet
Votes:****** Points:
Comments
9
widowed woman
next door to us
crooning carnival songs
--Tikkis, Finland
Votes:*2**** Points:4
Comments
10
Fat Tuesday --
clouds of whipped cream
over hot pan cakes
--Karina Klesko; USA
Note: shrove Tuesday or fat Tuesday the day before lent , last day before fasting...
traditionally pancakes...
Votes:****** Points:
Comments
11
Optimism smiles
With a syncopated beat
The revelers dance
--Quentin Clingerman
Votes:**1*** Points:3
Comments
12
Venice carnival…
an employee dressed
in a king
--Magdalena Dale
Votes:*3**** Points:6
Comments
13
a night frenzy-
morning...sounds of drums
in my head
--Krzysztof Kokot; Poland
Votes:2-2-1*** Points:9
Comments
14
Carnival weaving a samba through city streets
--Catherine Lee, Maine USA
Votes:2-1-1*** Points:7
Comments
16
a little masquer
frightened by a big one -
death consoles her
--Tomislav Maretic
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments
carnival in Venice -
ReplyDeletemy shadow puts on
a mask
--Jacek Margolak
In quite an alluring way, Jacek brings us into the sunlight of Venice, and throws us into the theatre of the street; "my shadow" he says; " puts on a mask"; and too, immediately our curiosity is aroused as we read the word 'mask'. There, out in the street, is mystery and gaiety and fun; intimated by his introductory word "carnival". Who could resist this invitation to revelery? He has seduced us with three words--carnival, shadow and mask. This haiku does not conform to the neoclassical 5-7-5, structure but rather, flows with the writer's impetus, He uses a kireji after Line 1, but really, his fragment and phrase, is so well defined, the kireji could have been left out; but its being there, makes for a good visual. And he does it all in 13 syllables. Good job Jacek.
We in Trinidad and Tobago are egocentric about Carnival; we pride ourselves, and without blinking an eye, boast about our festival in the hot sunshine; our carnival of colour and rthymn; yet, Jacek's haiku lured me into googling the Venice Carnival.
Here are 2 links which give yet another taste to compliment this fabulous haiku.
http://www.visitvenice.co.uk/venice-carnival.html
http://www.carnivalofvenice.com/tema.asp?anno=2010
And a here's a link to Trinidad Carnival
http://www.nalis.gov.tt/carnival/carnival.htm
Thank you Jacek; and thank you all of the other fifteen writers, in this, another successful kukai.
much love
gillena; kukai coordinator
ReplyDeletehttp://juhanitikkanen.blogspot.com/2010/02/karibian-karnevaalihaikuja.html
Tikkis
ReplyDeleteThanks for your finnish translations of CKK#10
much love
gillena