CKK #16 Results

Caribbean Kigo #16 Kukai Results


Players:1. Nakamura Sakuon, Japan; 2. Bouwe Brouwer, The Netherlands; 3. Diane Mayr, USA; 4. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 5. Paul David Mena,USA; 6. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 7. Taro Kunugi, Japan; 8. Marleen Hulst, The Netherlands; 9. Jacek Margolak; Poland; 10. Reason A. Poteet, US, IN;
11. Cara Holman, USA; 12. Cezar-Florian Ciobîca, Romania; 13. John McDonald,Scotland; 14. Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 15. Catherine J.S. Lee, USA; 16. Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 17. Mary Davila, USA


#8; #9 FIRST PLACE
8
sudden thunder
we forget
our quarrel
--Marleen Hulst, The Netherlands
Votes:92**** Points: 13
Comments:



9
distant thunder
my children's room full
of whispers
--Jacek Margolak;POLAND
Votes:431*** Points: 13
Comments:1. Yes, I remember that as well;
2. I remember the same whispers from years ago, and this haiku brought them back so vividly...



#2; #3; #11 SECOND PLACE

2
distant thunder
his big brother
seems smaller now
--Bouwe Brouwer
Votes:331*** Points: 12
Comments:1. How do you know what the little brother is thinking about?2. I think this would be stronger without the last word



3
distant thunder...
the brush of cat fur
against my legs
--Diane Mayr, USA
Votes:222*** Points: 12
Comments:



11
after the thunder
stillness...
then birdsong
--Cara Holman
Votes:25**** Points: 12
Comments:



#12 THIRD PLACE

crack of thunder -
a heron letting slip
the scared frog
--Cezar-Florian Ciobîca
Votes:321*** Points: 10
Comments:1. The humanisation of the frog's activities costs a point;
2. The word "scared" is unnecessary, but still, I like this one;
3. I would have preferred #12 without “scared” (how does the poet know the frog’s mind?), but I’m voting for it anyway.



RESULTS CONTINUES

1
thunder stopped
lover's quarrel
sweet kiss
--Sakuo.
Votes:3*1*** Points: 6
Comments:



4
two clouds wrangling
whether thundering
or not
--Juhani Tikkanen
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments:



5
high-tension wire --
crows
answer the thunder
-- Paul David Mena
Votes:33**** Points:9
Comments:A high-voltage-juxtaposition worth an extra point.



6
thunder
under the blanket
I found myself
--Ralf Bröker, Germany
Votes:*1**** Points: 2
Comments:



7
a thunder
from nowhere afar;
end of afternoon nap
--Taro
Votes:****** Points: 0
Comments:



10
thunder unheard
a sudden burst of tears
wakes the new mom
--Reason A. Poteet, USA, IN
Votes:2***** Points: 2
Comments:



13
crow sitting
on a silver birch -
thunder and lightning
--John McDonald
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:



14
thunder peal -
little girl
begins cry
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:



15
nearby thunder . . .
an argument rumbles
up from the past
--Catherine J.S. Lee, USA
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:



16
ominous black clouds
overshadow the village...
grumbling thunder
--Keith A. Simmonds;T & T
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:



17
sudden thunder
a spider trapped
in its own web
--Mary Davila
Votes:22**** Points: 6
Comments:A nice word picture puzzle!



Late Entry

Listening to
Beethoven’s Fifth Symphony…
from afar the thunder
--Magdalena Dale