None of the comments during the kukai are from the kukai coordinator.
Comments and votes of the players are anonymously stated.
PLAYERS:1. Sheikha A, United Arab Emirates; 2. Ed Bremson, USA; 3. Eduard Tara, Romania; 4. Lakshmi Iyer, India; 5. Ana Drobot, Romania; 6. Mark Gilbert, UK; 7. Fatma Zohra Habis, Algeria; 8. Paul Callus, Malta; 9. Elaine Ashley, USA; 10. Dan C. Iulian, Romania; 11. Jacek Margolak, Poland; 12. Daniela Misso, Italy; 13. Melissa Dennison, UK; 14. Billy Antonio, Philippines
FIRST PLACE
12
a dive in the pool . . .
the fragrance of jasmine
spreads into the night
--Daniela Misso, Italy
VOTES: 331***SCORE:12
COMMENT 1:A haiku making readers experience fragrances as if they were there with the poet. we hear the sound of the dive and we smell the scent of jasmine.
COMMENT 2:leaving out the word ‘the’ in the last sentence may improve flow. Nice visual!
SECOND PLACE
1
pond splash
a frog dives in
butterfly style
--Sheikha A. Dubai, United Arab Emirates
VOTES: 3*2***SCORE:09
COMMENT :A humorous take on the famous old pond poem by Basho
4
dive in and out . . .
the gibbous moon bounces
on a dolphin's nose
--Lakshmi Iyer, India
VOTES: 221***SCORE:09
COMMENT :There's such palpable innocence and playfulness in this haiku. To me, this alludes to goals and dreams too, a childlike purity in nurturing ambitions held at tender ages, believing everything and anything is possible.
THIRD PLACE
14
first light at the pond
the ducks begin
to dive in
--Billy Antonio, Laoac, Philippines
VOTES: 121***SCORE:08
RESULTS CONTINUE
2
white noise–
cicadas invite me
to dive in
--Ed Bremson, Raleigh,USA
VOTES: 1*2***SCORE:07
3
before diving in -
sending his cormorant
into the twilight
--Eduard TARA, ROMANIA
VOTES: *11***SCORE:05
COMMENT 1:So much mystery and tragedy in this haiku is what I perceive. The questions why he was diving in and into what and why did he release his cormorant first, or is the cormorant a metaphor for death and darkness... stark, probing and mysterious imagery.
COMMENT 2:I love the tranquility of this, and the timelessness of this fishing method commonly used in China and Japan. It says so much about existence and our relationship with nature.
5
old pond -
I dive in
a dream
--Ana Drobot, Bucharest, Romania
VOTES: *1****SCORE:02
6
dive in
enjoy the flavor
drink responsibly
--Mark Gilbert, UK
VOTES: 1*****SCORE:01
COMMENT :I enjoy the humour and the insightful observation of contradictory messages in society. Please spend money, buy a drink, have fun, but not too much. Within limits.
7
first cold rain
the smell of earth
makes me dive in
--Fatma Zohra Habis/ Algeria
VOTES: *12***SCORE:07
COMMENT : An intense atmosphere, of images, scents, and physical sensation.
8
hunger pains –
cormorants dive in
where frothing waves break
--Paul Callus (Malta)
VOTES: 21****SCORE:04
9
lone eagle hunting
circles dive-in eatery
splash! salmon for lunch
--Elaine Ashley, USA
VOTES: *1****SCORE:02
10
blue lagoon −
the pearler dives in
the sky
--Dan C. Iulian, Romania
VOTES: *21***SCORE:07
11
shattered sky —
a fish's dive in
the milky way
--Jacek Margolak, Poland
VOTES: 111***SCORE:06
COMMENT 1:I like the imagery in this. To me, reads like a scifaiku, not just because of the Milky Way, but alluding to the zodiac element/constellation of fish (pisces), and the Milky Way to seem like a liquid plane of stars.
COMMENT 2:I imagine an ocean on a clear night, as a fish dives in to the reflection of the night sky. The juxtaposition between big and small, eternity and ephemera, it's lovely.
13
blue splash
a kingfisher dives in
to morning
--Melissa Dennison, UK
VOTES: *2****SCORE:04
HAPPY HAIKU POETRY DAY; APRIL 17TH
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