Friday, May 21, 2010
Caribbean Kigo #13 Kukai Results
Players: 1. John McDonald, Scotland; 2. Jacek Margolak; Poland; 3. Quentin Clingerman,MD, USA; 4. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 5. Ian Tuttle, San Francisco,California,U.S.A.; 6. Michelle Angelini, US; 7. Cara Holman, USA; 8 Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 9. Nakamura Sakuon, Japan; 10. Catherine J.S. Lee, USA; 11. Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 12. Tomislav Maretic, Croatia; 13. Reason A. Poteet, USA, IN; 14. Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 15. Bill Kenney, USA; 16. Mary Davila, USA; 17. Tatjana Debeljacki, Serbia.
#7 FIRST PLACE
strains of Mendelssohn
the groom fiddles
with his carnation
--Cara Holman, USA
Votes:215*** Points: 19
Comments: A nice clear picture of a very special occasion - evokes paradox of the
nervousness and happiness of the groom.
#2 SECOND PLACE
the scent of carnations
from a nearby garden—
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:323*** Points: 16
#12 THIRD PLACE
toliko suprotnih// so many
osjecaja – samo// contrary feelings –
jedan karanfil // just a carnation
Note: Yugoslavia the red carnations were worn on May 1, as a symbol of labor movements, but in the same time this flower was for us there the symbol of the bloody communist dictatorship (sometimes hypocritically called „socialism with a human face“). Thanks God, we can now look at the carnation as a flower free of any ideologisation...and... it is really wonderful !
Votes:232*** Points: 14
Comments: 1. A poem about why the poem can't be written; unusual, to say the least.
2.This haiku is one of my favorites, not only for the translation, but for the depth of emotion in the words. What language is it?
the red carnation
the old cat yawning
Comments:1.Snapshot-like; a good catch
2. L3 "an old cat yawning" ?
May 1 is May Day
Flag waves in the breeze
Carnations in vase
--Quentin Clingerman, MD, USA
Votes:*1**** Points: 2
the carnations I bought
--Ralf Bröker, Germany
Votes:2***** Points: 2
Comments:Shows a nice transition from a school graduation to life's graduations of love and togetherness
She folds and refolds the highway map
In her daydreams
bees pollinate budding blooms
Votes:**1*** Points: 3
was a green one
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:The double meaning of this haiku is deceptively simple, yet in these 7 words are not only the meaning of the growth of the flower, but also the growth of the person holding it
in your black eyes
Comments: A beautiful photo of a moment, but one or two more words might have connected the carnation to the love seen, yet I can see the black eyes shining with unshed tears
of tissue and pipecleaner . . .
mother’s keepsake box
--Catherine J.S. Lee, USA
Votes:4*1*** Points: 7
Comments: Didn't every child have one of these, no matter what they held or what they were made of?
red carnations glow
in the patient's room ...
a broken vase
--Keith A. SIMMONDS; T & T
Votes:2***** Points: 2
Comments: Nice analogy comparing the patient to the broken vase. Much deeper meaning
here than on the surface; one just needs to be aware of it.
the crayon he picks
to make Mom's card
--Reason A. Poteet, USA, IN
Votes:52**** Points: 9
Comments: 1. There's nothing wrong with simplicity
2. The memories this haiku brings back are bittersweet. It's almost like saying, "I remember and would like to go back to that time...."
she gives the traveller
a glass of water and carnation
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:11**** Points: 3
Comments:This haiku is a mini-moment of "stranger on the train" friendship, an unexpected lift in the midst of weariness. No words are needed, the actions say it all.
but the red carnation
in an old man's buttonhole
Comments:1. I did like this, but how about this: " rainy Monday / in an old man's buttonhole / a red carnation" ?
2. A dreary day plus the weariness of age is brightened by the centered image of
something colorful and beautiful. Nice image.
the depressed petals
of a paper carnation –
The carnation flovers
In the red field.
Votes:****** Points: 0
quick link to past winners way back to kukai #1
Saturday, May 1, 2010
red carnation image from...
Caribbean Kigo Kukai # 13
Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo Twelfth Kukai
The kigo is carnation
Send one haiku which includes the word carnation or carnations
in a small vase at
my favourite restuarant -
Deadline for sending entries is May 10th 2010
Deadline for sending votes is May 20th 2010
A voting list will be e-mailed to all players
Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Comments during voting are encouraged but must be limited to 3 lines; when published these comments and the votes will be given anonymous listings.
Ballots(votes and comments)to be sent to
The results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai
After results have been posted, any comments you wish to make can be posted directly just click on 'comments' at the end of the post