Monday, May 23, 2011
Caribbean Kigo #24 Kukai Results
(comments and votes of the players are anonymously stated)
Players: 1. John Daleiden, Phoenix, Arizona in the Sonoran Desert; 2. Ramona Linke, Germany; 3. Marleen Hulst, The Netherlands; 4. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 5. Alegria Imperial; Canada 6. Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 7. Gheorghe Postelnicu, Romania; 8. John McDonald, Scotland; 9.Bouwe Brouwer, The Netherlands; 10. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 11. Cara Holman, USA; 12. Jacek Margolak, Poland; 13. Diane Mayr, USA; 14. William Kenney, USA; 15. Patricia Lidia, Romania; 16. Sanjukta Asopa, Karnataka, India; 17. Catherine J.S. Lee, USA; 18. Cezar-Florian Ciobîca,Romania
#18 - FIRST PLACE
old diary -
between two blank pages
a pink ribbon
-- Cezar-Florin Ciobîca
Comments 1:It's the blankness of the pages that makes this interesting.
Comments 2: Nice image. I read it as either the ribbon was all the entry that was needed, perhaps belonging to a romantic interest or perhaps simply a bookmark with no current entry but in either case I enjoy both interps.
#14 SECOND PLACE
old oak tree
a yellow ribbon
from a different war
Comments:A sad commentary in so few words.
#22 THIRD PLACE
floating on the breeze
--aye John McDonald
Comment 1:Line 3 merely explains lines 1-2, but the arrangement adds some effectiveness.
Comment 2:Nice pivot line and good implied association to Buddhist prayer ribbons.
tied with red ribbons--
old love letters
--John Daleiden, Phoenix, Arizona in the Sonoran Desert
Walpurgis Night ...
he loosens her hair ribbon
--Ramona Linke, Germany
on car’s antenna’s
--Marleen Hulst, The Netherlands
Comments:Two misplaced apostrophes are two too many; no points.
the white ribbon tells us
i tie ribbons
on my memoirs
Comments:"silk rain" makes this interesting, but "memoirs" introduces a note of pretension
blowing freely in her hair ...
a red ribbon
--Keith A. SIMMONDS T & T
cherries on ears
a ribbon plaiting hair -
head ... over ears
a kite stuck
in the tree, it's ribbons
caught in the wind
Comment 1:The misplaced apostrophe removes this one from consideration. No points.
Comment 2:I like the implied that the kite/ribbons are still trying to fly/escape
torn to ribbons -
Comments:There's a mismatch between lines 1-2 and line 3; the violence of "torn" doesn't sound like spring rain.
through the half-opened door
a ribbon of light
Comments:A "headline haiku" and effective as such. How effective it will be when it loses its topicality is another question.
sky clears up --
in the haberdasher's window
a rainbow ribbon
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
the ribbon less faded
than her memory
Comments:Nice turn on "faded." The objection conventionally raised to metaphor in haiku doesn't apply here, because both meanings of the word are common in current usage.
ribbon in my hair –
one more wrinkle on cheek
and my birthday
the winding highway
up the hills
ribbons of light falling
through stained glass
--Catherine J.S. Lee, USA
RECEIVED AFTER VOTING HAD STARTED
After the storm
the sun hidden behind
--Magdalena Dale - Romania
Sunday, May 1, 2011
'May Pole Dancers' an Ann Stapleton's acrylic on hardboard copyright of Trindad and Tobago Newsday
Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo Twenty Fourth Kukai
The kigo is ribbon
Send one haiku which includes ribbon e-mail to
into pattern; the swirling of
Deadline for sending entries is May 10th 2011
Deadline for sending votes is May 20th 2011
A voting list will be e-mailed to all players
Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Comments during voting are encouraged but must be limited to 3 lines; when published these comments and votes will be given anonymous listings.
Ballots: (votes and comments) to be sent to e-mail to
The results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai
After results have been posted, any comments you wish to make can be posted directly here at the blog just click on comments at the end of the post