CKK #19 Results

Caribbean Kigo #19 Kukai Results
(comments and votes of the players are anonymously stated)


Players: 1. Vasile Moldovan, Romania; 2. Gheorghe Postelnicu , Romania; 3. Quentin Clingerman, USA; 4. Patrick Druart, France; 5. John McDonald, Scotland; 6. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 7. Oprica Padeanu, Romania; 8. Franklin Magalhaes, Rio de Janeiro; 9. Patricia Lidia, Romania; 10. Marleen Hulst; The Netherlands; 11. karina klesko, USA; 12. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 13. Cara Holman, USA; 14. Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 15. Jacek Margolak, POLAND; 16. Nakamura Sakuon, Japan; 17. Michael Andrew Obrien, Galway, Ireland; 18. Reason A. Poteet, US, IN; 19. Bouwe Brouwer, The Netherlands; 20. Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 21. John Daleiden, Arizona, USA; 22. Magdalena Dale, Romania; 23. Sanjukta Asopa, Karnataka, India; 24. Cezar-Florian Ciobîca, Romania




#10 FIRST PLACE
autumn wreath
the dried sunflower
feeds a blackbird
--Marleen Hulst; The Netherlands
Votes:841*** Points:19
Comments:The notion that the “sunflower displayed in the wreath contributes to the longevity of a blackbird’s life by serving as food emphasizes the cyclic nature of the universe and the life forms found there.



#22 SECOND PLACE
New Year’s dawn…
on the top of the garbage
a Christmas wreath
--Magdalena Dale - Romania
Votes:641*** Points:17
Comments:



#15 THIRD PLACE
father's funeral...
the lily wreath
full of life
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:313*** Points:14
Comments:The juxtaposition of the dead (line 1) and the living “lily wreath / full of life” (lines 2-3)is meaningful. However, ironically, the lily used in the wreath, is also destined to the same kind of expiration of life as the “father” in line 1.



RESULTS CONTINUES


1
Jesus' wreath-
purple leaves falling
one by one
 Vasile Moldovan, Romania
Votes:2*1*** Points:5
Comments:



2
upside-down tear
by the crysanthemums wreath
every candle flame
--STOPS
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:



3
Silently the wreath
Displays the season's glory
Abundance of joy
--Quentin Clingerman
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments:


4
As every year
under the mistletoe wreath
the loving kiss
--druart patrick
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:


5
in a swirling wind
a wreath of leaves
settles at her door
-- john
Votes:52**** Points:9
Comments:


6
a child puts his candle
in the middle of
the advent wreath
--Juhani Tikkanen
Votes:2*1*** Points:5
Comments:


7
Ripe wheat-
a wreath of ears for
my mother's soul
--Oprica Padeanu, Romania
Votes:111*** Points:6
Comments:Why “ears” in line 2? Would the word “grains” be an improvement?


8
Christmas again.
Wreath in grandma's door
since last year.
--Franklin Magalhães
Votes:511*** Points:10
Comments:an emdash ( - )at the end of line one would be superior to a . (period).


9
Christmas wreath -
too early to hang,
too late to appologize
--Patricia Lidia, Romania
Votes:3***** Points:3
Comments:Nice juxtaposition of lines 3 & 4. Spelling--Apologize has only one p.


11
Christmas wreath
above the hearth
a butterfly emerges
--karina klesko
Votes:11**** Points:3
Comments:a nice use of the 2nd line as a pivot.


12
roof truss
carpenters brace
a ribboned wreath
--Ralf
Votes:3***** Points:3
Comments:


13
December again…
holiday lights
encircle the wreath
--Cara Holman
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:


14
a wide wreath
hanging on the front door...
dreams of Christmas
--Keith A. SIMMONDS; T & T
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments:


16
straw wreathes
decorated happy gates
the sound of New Year's bell
--Sakuo
Votes:*1****Points:2
Comments:Beautifull!


17
although too small
to carry the wreath
he longs for his father
--Michael Andrew; Galway, Ireland
Votes:21**** Points:4
Comments:


18
a victor's wreath
on the teacher's grave
his students still race
--Reason A. Poteet, US, IN
Votes:12**** Points:5
Comments:This “ victor’s wreath” is an unusual tribute to an educator.


19
first frost
under the morning moon
a wreath of leaves
--Bouwe
Votes:62**** Points:10
Comments:a good use of the kigo “first frost”. Line 2 functions nicely as a pivot line. “a wreath of leaves” seems highly unusual to me


20
advent wreath in a hospice -
whether everyone will see
fourth candle flame?
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:2***** Points:2
Comments:


21
funeral wreath--
cleaning the family graves
of spent blooms
--John Daleiden
Votes:321*** Points:10
Comments:


23
no wreath-
just the golden leaves
cover her grave
--sanjuktaa; Karnataka, India
Votes:12**** Points:5
Comments:


24
armistice -
waiting for my father
with a laurel wreath
--Cezar-Florian Ciobîca
Votes:221*** Points:9
Comments:The ambiguity of what event is inferred in this situation is poignant.


LATE ENTRY (received after voting had already started)

25
wind in the wreath
another Christmas
without her
--Bill


26
back of the bakery
day-old donuts on a wreath
the birds' christmas
--Diane

CKK #19

Caribbean Kigo Kukai #19

Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo nineteenth Kukai

The theme is wreath

Send one haiku which includes or makes reference to wreaths in any cultural aspect of your choice e-mail to

Example:-
a flame adorns
the advent wreath
first purple candle
--gillena cox


Wreaths Wreaths Wreaths (images)

Deadline for sending entries is November 10th 2010
Deadline for sending votes is November 20th 2010

A voting list will be e-mailed to all players

Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Example:-
Haiku#76………3pts
Haiku#34………2pts
Haiku#8………1pt

Comments during voting are encouraged but must be limited to 3 lines; when published these comments and votes will be given anonymous listings.

Ballots: (votes and comments) to be sent to e-mail to
The results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai

After results have been posted, any comments you wish to make can be posted directly here at the blog just click on comments at the end of the post

much love
gillena

CKK #18 results

Caribbean Kigo #18 Kukai Results

Players: 1.Marleen Hulst, The Netherlands; 2. Nakamura Sakuon, Japan; 3. John McDonald, Scotland; 4. Krzysztof Kokot, Poland; 5. Bill Kenney, USA; 6. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 7. Flory Brick, Daytona Beach, Florida; 8. Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 9. Cara Holman, USA; 10. Franklin Magalhaes, Rio de Janeiro, Brazil; 11. Jacek Margolak, POLAND; 12. Bouwe Brouwer, The Netherlands; 13. Taro Kunugi, Japan; 14. Sanjukta Asopa, Karnataka, India; 15. Reason A. Poteet, US, IN; 16. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 17. Gheorghe Postelnicu , Romania; 18. Cezar-Florian Ciobîca, Romania



#3 FIRST PLACE
festival lights
smeared
on the wet sidewalk
-- john McDonald
Votes:323*** Points:16
Comments:



#9; #11 SECOND PLACE
9
kindling the flame--
one candle
lights another
--Cara Holman
Votes:531*** Points:14
Comments:



11
autumn festival -
among the candle lanterns
a moth dancing
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:64**** Points:14
Comments:



#18 THIRD PLACE
row of lamps -
a blind begger sharing sweets
with his puppy
--Cezar-Florin Ciobîca
Votes:122*** Points:11
Comments:


RESULTS CONTINUES

1
carnival lights-
muffled sounds
cross the bay
--Marleen Hulst;The Netherlands
Votes:31**** Points:5
Comments:


2
maiden's cheek light up
I feel God's help
at Deyas night
--Sakuo
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments:


4
fireworks flashes-
among an amused crowd
the cry of lost child
--Krzysztof Kokot PL
Votes:33**** Points:9
Comments:


5
Christmas lights still hang
around the front porch . . .
foreclosed
--BILL KENNEY
Votes:*11*** Points:5
Comments:


6
correfoc
lighting her sparkler
not knowing it's her
--Ralf Bröker, Germany
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:


7
Celebrating
Festive lights flicker
Laughter
--Flory
Votes:*11*** Points:5
Comments:


8
flaming deyas
blot out the darkness...
festival of hope
--Keith A. Simmonds; T & T
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:


10
Fireworks on the beach.
Orishas blessing
the New Year
--Franklin Magalhaes, Rio de Janeiro, Brazil
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:


12
Roman theatre
stars shift slowly
above the stage
--Bouwe Brouwer;The Netherlands
Votes:111*** Points:6
Comments:


13
red lanterns
run like a huge snake
harvest festival
--Taro
Votes:11**** Points:3
Comments:


14
in the pause
between firecrackers
silence of a diya
--sanjuktaa
Votes:21**** Points:4
Comments:


15
princess parades
with a sparkle in her eye
trick or treat
--Reason A. Poteet, US, IN
Votes:*2**** Points:4
Comments:


16
in a nursing home
an old woman is awake --
bright festival lights
--Juhani Tikkanen
Votes:21**** Points:4
Comments:


17
Night landing
the festival of lights ends:
FASTEN YOUR BELTS!
--STOPS
Votes:21**** Points:4
Comments:

CKK #18

Caribbean Kigo Kukai #18

Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo eighteenth Kukai

The theme is festival lights

Send one haiku which includes reference to lights in any festival of your choice
e-mail to

Example:-
dark night sky
the deyas flicker for you
tonight
--gillena cox

in Trinidad and Tobago deyas are lit and placed in the notches of bamboo stripped, which have been dried and curved into intricate street sculptures, for the for the festival of Divali more about Divali in T&T

Deadline for sending entries is October 10th 2010
Deadline for sending votes is October 20th 2010

A voting list will be e-mailed to all players

Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Example:-
Haiku#76………3pts
Haiku#34………2pts
Haiku#8………1pt

Comments during voting are encouraged but must be limited to 3 lines; when published
these comments and votes will be given anonymous listings.

Ballots: (votes and comments) to be sent to e-mail to
The results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai

After results have been posted, any comments you wish to make can be posted directly
here at the blog just click on comments at the end of the post

much love
gillena

CKK #17 Results

Caribbean Kigo #17 Kukai Results


Players: 1. Taro Kunugi, Japan; 2. Quentin Clingerman,USA; 3. Gheorghe Postelnicu , Romania; 4. Marleen Hulst, Netherlands; 5. Diane Mayr, USA; 6. Bouwe Brouwer, The Netherlands; 7. Franklin Magalhães - Rio de Janeiro - Brazil; 8. Reason A. Poteet, USA, IN; 9. William Kenney, USA; 10. Cara Holman, USA; 11. Devika Jyhoti, IN; 12. Nakamura Sakuon, Japan; 13. Magdalena Dale, Romania; 14. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 15. Keith A. Simmonds, Trinidad and Tobago; 16. Zhanna P. Rader,USA; 17. Cezar-Florian Ciobîca, Romania; 18. Mary Davila, USA; 19. Flory Brick, Daytona Beach, Florida


#10 FIRST PLACE

twilight shadows--
the flash
of a bluebird's wing
--Cara Holman
Votes:641*** Points:17
Comments:


#9 SECOND PLACE

morning light
a bluejay's scolding
breaks the silence
--BILL KENNEY
Votes:821*** Points:15
Comments:


#4; 13; THIRD PLACE

4
funeral mass
her brief smile
at the bluebird outside
--Marleen Hulst
Votes:341*** Points:14
Comments:


13
at my window …
a bluebird carrying on its wings
the whole sky
--Magdalena Dale
Votes:341*** Points:14
Comments:



RESULTS CONTINUES


1
soaked with
the wind from sky
a bluebird
--Taro Kunugi
Votes:311*** Points:8
Comments:


2
Bluebird on the bath
Spotted by an old gray cat
A blue feather floats
--Quentin Clingerman
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:


3
Hundreds foot soldiers
browsing the cornfield non stop -
Bluebird cargo crash
-- STOPS; ROMANIA
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments:


5
spring passes...
bluebird houses occupied
by sparrows
--Diane Mayr
Votes:52**** Points:9
Comments:Nature's humour


6
patches of sky
left by fluttering leaves
a bluebird
--Bouwe Brouwer; The Netherlands
Votes:31**** Points:5
Comments:


7
Ripe bananas.
By singing, the bluebird pays
for their sweetness.
--Franklin Magalhães - Rio de Janeiro - Brazil
Votes:*1**** Points:2
Comments:


8
when I whistle
bluebirds flock to the tree
they have me trained
--Reason A. Poteet, USA, IN
Votes:*11*** Points:5
Comments:


11
a fairy bluebird’s
hurried whistling
as moon returns
--Devika Jyhoti
Notes:
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:


12
urgently call
I will back soon
Mrs. blue bird
--Sakuo
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments:


14
after a stormy night
the blue jean
still dry
--Juhani Tikkanen
Votes:211*** Points:7
Comments:Great possibilities to read this little haiku



15
rosy mangoes
dangle in the sunlit tree ~
a bluebird hiding
--Keith A. Simmonds
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments:


16
Eastern bluebird,
about to perch -
fan-winged.
--Zhanna P. Rader
Notes: http://tinyurl.com/3953nzh
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments:



17
bluebird’s song -
scattering the scent of pine
among crosses
--Cezar-Florian Ciobîca
Votes:42**** Points:8
Comments:


18
nursing home
a bluebird wanders through
the garden again — again
--Mary Davila
Votes:211*** Points:7
Comments:So real. So fantastic.


19
Bluebird calls
answering …
fly away
--Flory Brick
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:



Received Late

home already
those bluebird's colours
tinge the sky
--Ralf

CKK #17

blue grey tanager from...

Caribbean Kigo Kukai # 17

Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo seventeenth Kukai

The kigo is bluebird

Send one haiku which includes bluebird e-mail to

Example:-neighbours greet--
a blue jean swoops down
off the wall
--gillena cox

in Trinidad and Tobago the blue grey tanager is also called 'blue jean'

Deadline for sending entries is September 10th 2010
Deadline for sending votes is September 20th 2010

A voting list will be e-mailed to all players

Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Example:-
Haiku#76………3pts
Haiku#34………2pts
Haiku#8………1pt

Comments during voting are encouraged but must be limited to 3 lines; when published these comments and votes will be given anonymous listings.

Ballots: (votes and comments) to be sent to e-mail to
The results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai

After results have been posted, any comments you wish to make can be posted directly here at the blog just click on comments at the end of the post

much love
gillena

CKK #16 Results

Caribbean Kigo #16 Kukai Results


Players:1. Nakamura Sakuon, Japan; 2. Bouwe Brouwer, The Netherlands; 3. Diane Mayr, USA; 4. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 5. Paul David Mena,USA; 6. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 7. Taro Kunugi, Japan; 8. Marleen Hulst, The Netherlands; 9. Jacek Margolak; Poland; 10. Reason A. Poteet, US, IN;
11. Cara Holman, USA; 12. Cezar-Florian Ciobîca, Romania; 13. John McDonald,Scotland; 14. Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 15. Catherine J.S. Lee, USA; 16. Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 17. Mary Davila, USA


#8; #9 FIRST PLACE
8
sudden thunder
we forget
our quarrel
--Marleen Hulst, The Netherlands
Votes:92**** Points: 13
Comments:



9
distant thunder
my children's room full
of whispers
--Jacek Margolak;POLAND
Votes:431*** Points: 13
Comments:1. Yes, I remember that as well;
2. I remember the same whispers from years ago, and this haiku brought them back so vividly...



#2; #3; #11 SECOND PLACE

2
distant thunder
his big brother
seems smaller now
--Bouwe Brouwer
Votes:331*** Points: 12
Comments:1. How do you know what the little brother is thinking about?2. I think this would be stronger without the last word



3
distant thunder...
the brush of cat fur
against my legs
--Diane Mayr, USA
Votes:222*** Points: 12
Comments:



11
after the thunder
stillness...
then birdsong
--Cara Holman
Votes:25**** Points: 12
Comments:



#12 THIRD PLACE

crack of thunder -
a heron letting slip
the scared frog
--Cezar-Florian Ciobîca
Votes:321*** Points: 10
Comments:1. The humanisation of the frog's activities costs a point;
2. The word "scared" is unnecessary, but still, I like this one;
3. I would have preferred #12 without “scared” (how does the poet know the frog’s mind?), but I’m voting for it anyway.



RESULTS CONTINUES

1
thunder stopped
lover's quarrel
sweet kiss
--Sakuo.
Votes:3*1*** Points: 6
Comments:



4
two clouds wrangling
whether thundering
or not
--Juhani Tikkanen
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments:



5
high-tension wire --
crows
answer the thunder
-- Paul David Mena
Votes:33**** Points:9
Comments:A high-voltage-juxtaposition worth an extra point.



6
thunder
under the blanket
I found myself
--Ralf Bröker, Germany
Votes:*1**** Points: 2
Comments:



7
a thunder
from nowhere afar;
end of afternoon nap
--Taro
Votes:****** Points: 0
Comments:



10
thunder unheard
a sudden burst of tears
wakes the new mom
--Reason A. Poteet, USA, IN
Votes:2***** Points: 2
Comments:



13
crow sitting
on a silver birch -
thunder and lightning
--John McDonald
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:



14
thunder peal -
little girl
begins cry
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:



15
nearby thunder . . .
an argument rumbles
up from the past
--Catherine J.S. Lee, USA
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:



16
ominous black clouds
overshadow the village...
grumbling thunder
--Keith A. Simmonds;T & T
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:



17
sudden thunder
a spider trapped
in its own web
--Mary Davila
Votes:22**** Points: 6
Comments:A nice word picture puzzle!



Late Entry

Listening to
Beethoven’s Fifth Symphony…
from afar the thunder
--Magdalena Dale

CKK #16

Caribbean Kigo Kukai # 16

Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo sixteenth Kukai

The kigo is thunder

Send one haiku which includes the word thunder
e-mail to

Example:-
thunder peal--
repeated hellos fade back
into the phone line
--gillena cox

Deadline for sending entries is August 10th 2010
Deadline for sending votes is August 20th 2010

A voting list will be e-mailed to all players

Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Example:-
Haiku#76………3pts
Haiku#34………2pts
Haiku#8………1pt

Comments: during voting are encouraged but must be limited to 3 lines; when published these comments and votes will be given anonymous listings.

Ballots: (votes and comments) to be sent to e-mail to
The results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai

After results have been posted, any comments you wish to make can be posted directly here at the blog just click on comments at the end of the post

much love
gillena

CKK 15 Results

Caribbean Kigo #15 Kukai Results

Players:1. Tatjana Debeljacki, Serbia; 2. John McDonald, Scotland; 3. Nakamura Sakuon, Japan; 4. Bill Kenney, USA; 5. Taro Kunugi, Japan; 6. Jacek Margolak; Poland; 7. Cara Holman, USA; 8. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 9. Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 10. Franklin Magalhães, Rio de Janeiro Brazil; 11. Bouwe Brouwer, The Netherlands; 12. Olga Neagu 13. Robert Nowak, Walbrzych, Poland; 14. John Daleiden, USA; .15.Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 16. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 17. Vasile Moldovan, Romania; 18. Magdalena Dale, Romania 19. Reason A. Poteet, US, IN; 20. Devika Jyothi, India; 21. Cezar-Florian Ciobîca, Romania; 22. Tomislav Maretic, Croatia; 23. Catherine J.S. Lee, USA


#4 FIRST PLACE

summer rain
my umbrella
unopened
--BILL KENNEY
Votes:435*** Points: 25
Comments: I like the way this haiku shows the poet prepared for a not-so-nice day, but then when it comes, finds joy in it instead.



# SECOND PLACE

23
after divorce court –
still, she offers to share
her umbrella
--Catherine J.S. Lee, USA
Votes:641*** Points: 17
Comments:If this was shorter, it would be my favourite one.



#21 THIRD PLACE
drought -
my son is drawing again
clouds and umbrellas
--Cezar-Florian Ciobîca, Romania
Votes:422*** Points:14
Comments:Never to young to practice hope.


RESULTS CONTINUES

1
spring rain -
an old women under umbrella
picks mushrooms
-- Tatjana Debeljacki
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:No points, but I like the picture this poem paints and would have voted for it if not for the grammatical errors


2
screams of delight -
mother's umbrella's
become a kite
--John McDonald
Votes:22***1 Points: 12
Comments:


3
at the door / mother has forgotten / single umbrella
--Sakuo.
Votes:3***** Points:3
Comments:


5
paper umbrella
unfolded to cracking rains
smell of wax
--Taro Kunugi
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:


6
meteor shower---
I take
my paper umbrella
--Jacek Margolak;POLAND
Votes:22**** Points:6
Comments:1. So mysterious.
2. Love the whimsy in this one.


7
sudden summer squall--
my umbrella
safe at home
-- Cara Holman
Votes:2***** Points: 2
Comments:


8
cloudless morning
my little son demands
his own umbrella
--Ralf
Votes:3***** Points: 3
Comments:


9
two lovers giggling
under a small umbrella...
summer downpour
--Keith A. Simmonds;T & T
Votes:22**** Points:6
Comments:


10
The storm has passed.
In the muddy alley
a broken umbrella
-- Franklin Magalhães - Rio de Janeiro Brazil
Votes:421*** Points: 11
Comments:


11
folding in
the umbrella, one by one
stars reappear
--Bouwe Brouwer; The Netherlands
Votes:411**** Points:9
Comments:


12
rain stopped -
a pink umbrella left
on the bench
--Olga Neagu
Votes:*2**** Points: 4
Comments:


13
"an umbrella in the rain
in a deserted park
the giggle of lovers"
--Robert Nowak ; Walbrzych, Poland
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:


14
in the wind
an insideout umbrella--
summer monsoon
--John Daleiden
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:


15
cloudy day -
in the evening waiter counts
forgotten umbrellas
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:11**** Points: 3
Comments:


16
my umbrella
looking up to the rainbow
during a heavy thunderstorm
--Tikkis
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:


17
Walking through the rain...
only an umbrella for
both sweethearts
--Vasile Moldovan
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:


18
Red umbrella -
the sounds of rain drops
around us
--Magdalena Dale
Votes:33***** Points: 9
Comments:Very simple, very good.


19
on the horizon
above my umbrella
rainbow's zany smile
--Reason A. Poteet, US, IN
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:


20
slate-grey sky -
she spins
her polka dot umbrella
--devika
Votes:2***** Points:2
Comments:


22
summer rainstorm –
people on the street wrestling
with umbrellas
-- Tomislav Maretic
Votes:22**** Points: 6
Comments:


quick link to past winners way back to kukai #1

CKK #15

umbrella image from...

Caribbean Kigo Kukai # 15

Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo fifteenth Kukai

The kigo is umbrella

Send one haiku which includes the word umbrella
e-mail to

Example:-
opened umbrella--
the laughter of two friends
in pouring rain
--gillena cox

Deadline for sending entries is July 10th 2010
Deadline for sending votes is July 20th 2010

A voting list will be e-mailed to all players

Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Example:-
Haiku#76………3pts
Haiku#34………2pts
Haiku#8………1pt

Comments: during voting are encouraged but must be limited to 3 lines; when published these comments and the votes will be given anonymous listings.

Ballots: (votes and comments) to be sent to e-mail to
The results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai

After results have been posted, any comments you wish to make can be posted directly just click on comments at the end of the post

much love
gillena

CKK 14 Results

Caribbean Kigo #14 Kukai Results

Players:1.Devika Jyothi, India; 2.Nakamura Sakuon, Japan; 3.Tatjana Debeljacki, Serbia.; 4.Cara Holman, USA; 5.Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 6.Jacek Margolak; 7.John MacDonald, Scotland; 8.Quentin Clingerman, MD, USA; 9.Ralf Bröker, Germany; 10.Ian Tuttle; San Francisco, CA, USA; 11.Bill Kenney, USA; 12.Reason A. Poteet, USA, IN; 13.Franklin Magalhaes, Rio de Janeiro, Brazil; 14.Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 15.Melissa Allen, Madison, Wisconsin, USA; 16.Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 17. Mary Davila, USA; 18.Catherine J.S. Lee, Maine, USA; 19.Cezar-Florian Ciobîca, Romania; 20.Magdalena Dale; 21.Vasile Moldovan, Romania

#13 FIRST PLACE

My father's face
forty years later
back in my mirror
--Franklin Magalhaes
Votes:55***1 Points: 21
Comment:1. So true: we become our parents.
Comment:2. Like how it tells about the way we become more like our parents with age. And the memories it brings


#11 SECOND PLACE

autumn memory
of those walks with my father . . .
so many silences
--BILL KENNEY
Votes:423*** Points: 17
Comments:Autumn has been chosen as the season to link with memory and also the silent zones in communication between generations


#16 #17 THIRD PLACE
16
father planting
new violets
on his son's grave
--Tikkis
Votes:431*** Points: 13
Comments:The image speaks for itself, and the poet stays out of the way.


17
Father’s Day . . .
I try to remember
his voice
--Mary Davila
Votes:322*** Points: 13
Comment 1:Touches on loss and remembrance so eloquently.
Comment 2:The pathos of memory.


RESULTS CONTINUED

1
car takes the gravel road-
cradled in my lap
father’s funerary urn
--devika
Votes:*2**** Points: 4
Comments:Line 2 is strong, but line 1 doesn't need the first three words, "funerary urn" is a mouthful ("ashes" would do), and the word order of lines 2-3 is forced for false emphasis (line 2 would make a great line 3).


2
the smell of tobacco
reminds me
father’s big hug
--Sakuo
Votes:3***** Points: 3
Comments:A Proustian moment. Might have more emotional kick if line 3 were line 1, but you could argue either way, and there's more to poetry than emotional kicks..


3
Fathers birthday
Daughter sketchers him under the tree
He leaned his hat.
--Tatjana
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:


4
my father’s orchard—
tending his fruit trees
reaping the harvest
--Cara Holman
Votes:3****** Points: 3
Comments:Novelistic density in a haiku. The shift from "his" (line 2) to "the" (line 3) is masterly.


5
a father thinking
about his only son ...
Irak war
--Keith A. SIMMONDS
Votes:31**** Points: 5
Comments:


6
Father's Day-
smoother than ever
his cheeks
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:211*** Points: 7
Comments:


7
dozing
in my father's hat:
source of dreams
--John MacDonald
Votes:211*** Points:7
Comments:


8
Dad you did your best
May you rest in that knowledge
From Son who now knows
--Que
Votes:*1**** Points: 2
Comments:


9
father’s birthday
I pick up Mum
for mass
--Ralf
Votes:22***** Points: 6
Comments:A way of life--of at least three lives, in fact--caught with absolute economy.


10
Your Mickey Mouse watch,
Itself your best lesson:
Time is the currency of life.
--Ian Tuttle; San Francisco, CA, USA
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:


12
one eye on the clock
the dead bolt sounds dad's alarm
curfew
--Reason A. Poteet, USA, IN
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:


14
father's day -
tears in the boy's eyes
from the orphanage
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:42**** Points:8
Comments:


15
my father’s car
part of
my inheritance
-- Melissa Allen
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:


18
that empty chair
at this year's celebration --
Father's Day
--Catherine J.S. Lee, Maine, USA
Votes:2*1*** Points: 5
Comments:Absence becomes more prominent during celebration. The way his predominance is maintained, signified by the empty chair, even in his absence.


19
first shaving -
the old blazor reminds me
of my dad
--Cezar-Florian Ciobîca, Romania
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:


20
After his death
the dust on my dad’s hat…
ice moon
--Magdalena Dale
Votes:5*1*** Points: 8
Comments 1: L1 not necessary needed?
the dust
on my dad's hat ...
ice moon
Comments 2:I'm not sure about the jux, but I can see the dust.


21
Alway an empty chair
at the head of the table-
my father's
--Vasile Moldovan, Romania
Votes:3***** Points: 3
Comments:First word, always, not needed?



LATE ENTRY received while voting was in process
faded photo
getting to meet father
for the first time
--Warren Gossett; USA

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CKK #14

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Caribbean Kigo Kukai # 14

Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo fourteenth Kukai

The theme is fathers

Send one haiku which incorporates this theme e-mail to

Example:-
the hat rack
the house where i grew up
only dad's hat
--gillena cox

During the month of June many countries all over the globe celebrate in some special way fathers

...Historians have recorded that there was a tradition to celebrate Father's Day even thousands of years ago. Their study say that 4,000 years ago in Babylon a son called Elmesu carved a father's day message on a clay card. In his message Elmesu wished his father a long and healthy life. There is no knowledge as to what happened to this father son duo but it is believed that several countries retained the custom of celebrating Father's Day...more

Deadline for sending entries is June 10th 2010
Deadline for sending votes is June 20th 2010

A voting list will be e-mailed to all players

Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Example:-
Haiku#76………3pts
Haiku#34………2pts
Haiku#8………1pt

Comments during voting are encouraged but must be limited to 3 lines; when published these comments and the votes will be given anonymous listings.
Ballots(votes and comments)to be sent e-mail to

The results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai

After results have been posted, any comments you wish to make can be posted directly just click on comments at the end of the post

much love
gillena

CKK #13 Results

Caribbean Kigo #13 Kukai Results

Players: 1. John McDonald, Scotland; 2. Jacek Margolak; Poland; 3. Quentin Clingerman,MD, USA; 4. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 5. Ian Tuttle, San Francisco,California,U.S.A.; 6. Michelle Angelini, US; 7. Cara Holman, USA; 8 Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 9. Nakamura Sakuon, Japan; 10. Catherine J.S. Lee, USA; 11. Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 12. Tomislav Maretic, Croatia; 13. Reason A. Poteet, USA, IN; 14. Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 15. Bill Kenney, USA; 16. Mary Davila, USA; 17. Tatjana Debeljacki, Serbia.


#7 FIRST PLACE

strains of Mendelssohn
the groom fiddles
with his carnation
--Cara Holman, USA
Votes:215*** Points: 19
Comments: A nice clear picture of a very special occasion - evokes paradox of the
nervousness and happiness of the groom.


#2 SECOND PLACE

the scent of carnations
from a nearby garden—
evening rain
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:323*** Points: 16
Comments:


#12 THIRD PLACE

toliko suprotnih// so many
osjecaja – samo// contrary feelings –
jedan karanfil // just a carnation
--Tomislav Maretic
Note: Yugoslavia the red carnations were worn on May 1, as a symbol of labor movements, but in the same time this flower was for us there the symbol of the bloody communist dictatorship (sometimes hypocritically called „socialism with a human face“). Thanks God, we can now look at the carnation as a flower free of any ideologisation...and... it is really wonderful !
Votes:232*** Points: 14
Comments: 1. A poem about why the poem can't be written; unusual, to say the least.
2.This haiku is one of my favorites, not only for the translation, but for the depth of emotion in the words. What language is it?


RESULTS CONTINUES


1
next to
the red carnation
the old cat yawning
--john McDonald
Votes:3*1*** Points:6
Comments:1.Snapshot-like; a good catch
2. L3 "an old cat yawning" ?


3
May 1 is May Day
Flag waves in the breeze
Carnations in vase
--Quentin Clingerman, MD, USA
Votes:*1**** Points: 2
Comments:


4
graduation ball
the carnations I bought
roses now
--Ralf Bröker, Germany
Votes:2***** Points: 2
Comments:Shows a nice transition from a school graduation to life's graduations of love and togetherness


5
She folds and refolds the highway map
In her daydreams
Carnations
---Ian Tuttle
Votes:11**** Points:3
Comments:


6
crimson carnations
bees pollinate budding blooms
cinnamon scented
--Michelle Angelini
Votes:**1*** Points: 3
Comments:


8
when younger
this carnation
was a green one
--Tikkis
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:The double meaning of this haiku is deceptively simple, yet in these 7 words are not only the meaning of the growth of the flower, but also the growth of the person holding it


9
finding love
in your black eyes
carnation
--sakuo.
Votes:12**** Points:5
Comments: A beautiful photo of a moment, but one or two more words might have connected the carnation to the love seen, yet I can see the black eyes shining with unshed tears


10
childhood carnation
of tissue and pipecleaner . . .
mother’s keepsake box
--Catherine J.S. Lee, USA
Votes:4*1*** Points: 7
Comments: Didn't every child have one of these, no matter what they held or what they were made of?


11
red carnations glow
in the patient's room ...
a broken vase
--Keith A. SIMMONDS; T & T
Votes:2***** Points: 2
Comments: Nice analogy comparing the patient to the broken vase. Much deeper meaning
here than on the surface; one just needs to be aware of it.


13
pink carnation
the crayon he picks
to make Mom's card
--Reason A. Poteet, USA, IN
Votes:52**** Points: 9
Comments: 1. There's nothing wrong with simplicity
2. The memories this haiku brings back are bittersweet. It's almost like saying, "I remember and would like to go back to that time...."


14
florist -
she gives the traveller
a glass of water and carnation
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:11**** Points: 3
Comments:This haiku is a mini-moment of "stranger on the train" friendship, an unexpected lift in the midst of weariness. No words are needed, the actions say it all.


15
rainy Monday–
but the red carnation
in an old man's buttonhole
--BILL KENNEY
Votes:41**** Points:6
Comments:1. I did like this, but how about this: " rainy Monday / in an old man's buttonhole / a red carnation" ?
2. A dreary day plus the weariness of age is brightened by the centered image of
something colorful and beautiful. Nice image.


16
the depressed petals
of a paper carnation –
shock therapy
--Mary Davila
Votes:*3**** Points:6
Comments:


17
Is reflecting
The carnation flovers
In the red field.
--Tatjana Debeljacki
Votes:****** Points: 0
Comments:


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CKK#13

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Caribbean Kigo Kukai # 13

Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo Twelfth Kukai

The kigo is carnation

Send one haiku which includes the word carnation or carnations
e-mail to

Example:-
in a small vase at
my favourite restuarant -
red carnations
--gillena cox

Deadline for sending entries is May 10th 2010
Deadline for sending votes is May 20th 2010

A voting list will be e-mailed to all players

Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Example:-
Haiku#76………3pts
Haiku#34………2pts
Haiku#8………1pt

Comments during voting are encouraged but must be limited to 3 lines; when published these comments and the votes will be given anonymous listings.

Ballots(votes and comments)to be sent to
e-mail to

The results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai

After results have been posted, any comments you wish to make can be posted directly just click on 'comments' at the end of the post

much love
gillena

CKK #12 Results

Caribbean Kigo #12 Kukai Results

Players: 1. William Kenny, USA; 2. Ramona Linke, Germany; 3. John McDonald, Scotland; 4. Vasile Moldovan, Romania; 5. Sakuon Nakamura, Japan; 6. Quentin Clingerman, USA; 7. Keith A. Simmonds, TT; 8. Jacek Margolak, Poland; 9. Krzysztof Kokot; Poland;; 10. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 11. Cara Holman, USA; 12. Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 13. John Daleiden; Avondale, AZ, USA; 14. Mary Davila, USA; 15. Catherine J.S. Lee, Maine; 16.Rafal Zabratynski, Poland; 17. Tatjana Debeljacki, Serbia


#16 FIRST PLACE
windy beach
a small boy struggles
with the dragon kite
--Rafal Zabratynski
Votes:451*** Points:17
Comments:1.I smiled at the image of a small boy struggling with perhaps a very large kite, trying to get it aloft.
2. Cute metaphor suggesting it's the dragon he battles and not the wind.


# 3 SECOND PLACE
kite-flying -
father holds his son's
coat-tail
--john McDonald
Votes:612*** Points: 14
Comments:I like it not just because of the humor implied that the kite might fly away with his son but the grain of truth that on a windy day and for a young enough child that you might have to sturdy them from being pull off balance and to reassure the child. Since the word coat-tail reminds me of the expression of gaining success on others achievements I wonder if it was chosen here saying that the father was vicariously flying the kite as well.


#8 #15 THIRD PLACE

8
windy day
the rainbow of kites
on a cloudless sky
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:241*** Points:13
Comments:Nice metaphor and irony with cloudless sky. I'm not sure you need line 1.

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15
spring regatta –
a white kite catches
the salt breeze
--Catherine J.S. Lee
Votes:431*** Points:13
Comments:1.Very vivid-- I like the way so much is implied in so few words. I imagine a sparkling breezy day, and the white of the regatta sails.
2.Nicely done, I enjoyed the association of kiting with sailing.


RESULTS CONTINUES


1
kites in the wind
children run along the beach
waving their arms
--BILL KENNEY
Votes:21**** Points: 4
Comments:This reminded me of the feeling of flight when holding the kite string and I like that it was only implied in lines 2 and 3.


2
seaside hotel …
kites weave a gaudy pattern
into my evening sky
--Ramona Linke, Germany
Votes:21**** Points:4
Comments:"Gaudy" has a negative connotation for me like the excessive bulb and neon light displays of Las Vegas so I don't understand the comparison to kites. I was also confused about flying and being able to see kites at night. Are they spotlit on seashores?


4
Airy  accident-
a kite's tail catches
at a straw
--Vasile Moldovan, ROMANIA
Votes:2***** Points:2
Comments:I like this. I was confused by use of the word straw, isn't straw grain/hay that has already been threshed then bundled or bailed or laid for bedding? Maybe something like 'skims the hay field'? I wonder for line 1 something else that wouldn't give it away and more concrete.


5
I'll kite
to win violence
of human nature
--sakuo
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:A bit abstract. I don't understand the word choice 'violence'.


6
Kite high in the sky
Tail wind made it soar so high
Long time descending
--Quentin Clingerman; USA
Votes:****** Points:00
Comments:I want to read it with more description and less narration and perhaps with an implied meaning or message. The repeat of the word high seems only to satisfy they 5-7-5 syllable count and not contribute to the message


7
father and son
reeling the sunset in
with their mad bull kite
--Keith A. Simmonds; T & T
Votes:1*1*** Points: 4
Comments:I like the metaphors. I wonder if instead to imply them.


9
gusty desert wind -
little Afghan is strugging
with colour kite
--KRZYSZTOF KOKOT PL
Votes:**1*** Points: 3
Comments:I don't understand the reason for pointing out the child's nationality. Perhaps if the kite colors were that of a flag? In strugging I think your missing the L for struggling.


10
I'm feeling cold --
how do you manage,
my kite, up there?
--Tikkis
Votes:2***** Points:2
Comments:1. I found this charming, the way the writer anthropomorphizes the kite.
2.I like it. I was initially confused by the phrasing, unsure who you were asking the question to, God, the wind, the sun, etc. but now I understand it's to the kite its self. I wonder about rephrasing like... shivering - little kite - how do you manage?


11
kite tails tease the waves
the spray of surf
upon her face
--Cara Holman, USA
Votes:21**** Points: 4
Comments:Nice metaphor. I also enjoyed the iambic rhythm in lines 2 and 3.


12
brisk morning -
eagle-shaped kite
over the rainbow
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:11**** Points:3
Comments:Nice metaphor. Not sure what Line 1 adds. I want to read a little more to the message.


13
a rose red kite
among the April clouds
my billet deux
--John Daleiden, Avondale, AZ
Votes:1****1 Points:7
Comments:I had to look it up, billet deux is a love letter, right? A charming juxtaposition of this romantic description and a love letter.


14
another kite dragged
through the dying winds . . .
second hand smoke
--Mary Davila
Votes:*1**** Points: 2
Comments:I read juxtaposition of a drooping kite and second hand cigarette smoke which is exposure to non-smokers implying children. With such a strong message I wonder about it expressed even less direct, instead of dying winds describe the kites difficulty, instead of second hand smoke describe it order or appearance


17
What is that dad
The little boy is curious
A kite made of paper.
--Tatjana Debeljacki
Votes:1***** Points: 1
Comments:I want to read it with more showing and less telling and with some connotation or message.

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This poem was received too late to be listed for votes

stormy day
the flying line ends in
mother's comfort
--Ralf Bröker,Germany

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CKK#12

Caribbean Kigo Kukai # 12

Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo Twelfth Kukai

The theme is kite flying

Send one haiku which reflects this theme to
e-mail to


Example:-
a windy sky-
theatre of
clouds and kites
--gillena cox

In Trinidad and Tobago, we more often say in our everyday speech 'flying kite' rather than kite flying


Deadline for sending entries is April 10th 2010
Deadline for sending votes is April 20th 2010

A voting list will be e-mailed to all players

Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Example:-
Haiku#76………3pts
Haiku#34………2pts
Haiku#8………1pt

Comments are encouraged but must be limited to 3 lines
When published votes and comments will be given anonymous listings.

Ballots(votes and comments)to be sent to
e-mail to


The results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai

After results have been posted, any comments you wish to make can be posted directly just click on comments at the end of the post

much love
gillena

CKK#11 Results

Caribbean Kigo #11 Kukai Results

Players: 1. Quentin Clingerman, USA; 2. Armando Corbelle , USA; 3. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 4. Keith A. Simmods, TT; 5. Jacek Margolak, Poland; 6. Reason A. Poteet, USA; 7. Sakuon Nakamura, Japan; 8. John McDonald, Scotland; 9. Vasile Moldovan, Romania; 10. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 11. Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 12. John Daleiden; Avondale, AZ, USA; 13. Tatjana Debeljacki, Serbia; 14. Krzysztof Kokot; Poland; 15. Rafal Zabratynski, Poland; 16. Mary Davila, USA; 17. Catherine J.S. Lee, Maine


#8 FIRST PLACE
ashes
on my forehead
the priest's cold thumb
-- john McDonald
Votes:4-2-3-*** Points:17
Comments: 1. This lovely haiku is a fine example of a verse that uses the middle line, the second line, as a pivot. Thus, the haiku can be read in two ways--lines 1-2 as a lovely thought, and lines 2-3 as a second lovely thought. Well done indeed.
2. Nice, the tactile description of the human aspect of this religious ceremony brought a sudden realism for me.



#15 - SECOND PLACE
end of the mass
an old man wipes ashes off
his bald head
--Rafal Zabratynski
Votes:2-2-3*** Points:15
Comments: 1. to his credit, not wanting to draw attention to himself
2. I like this haiku, but would have liked it better with the 2nd line revised: “an old man wipes off ashes” and with the 3rd line revision: “from his bald head” . I think “the” in line one is not necessary. In any event, I like the ironic relationship between the “end of mass” and the wiping away of the ashes.
3. I like that this wasn't characterized and we are left to wonder why he wipes the ashes away. That it's pointed out that he is both old and bald confused me.


#11 THIRD PLACE
funeral -
on the urn with the ashes
yellow butterfly
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:6-4-**** Points: 14
Comments: Neat. I enjoyed the metaphor and also liked wondering whether the yellow butterfly was real or painted/glazed on the urn. Not sure you need "with the ashes" except as part of the kukai:) maybe drop line 1 then... on the urn - with the ashes - yellow butterfly



RESULTS CONTINUES

1
Ashes to ashes
The crematorium sings
Urn on the mantel
--Quentin Clingerman
Votes:****** Points:00
Comments: 1. Although I was tempted to vote for this one, ultimately I did not. Line 2 is to much personification for me--”crematoriums” just do not sing, even though the sentiment is nice.
2. Nice elements. I wonder if it were more simplified, maybe less direct, more implied meaning


2
Too many ashes
in Haiti and Chile
its time for some joy
--Catbird 55
Votes:3***** Points:3
Comments: Very true. Perhaps more showing and less telling, like... Haiti and Chile ash - children and adults - playing in the rain


3
her freckles
this morning
crossed by easter fire's ashes
--Ralf
Votes:2-1**** Points:4
Comments: Nice. Freckles conjure images of children and innocence in contrast to a strong religious symbol for the repentance of sin on their forehead. I think "crossed" would work better at the end of line 2 (was that just a line break error?) and "fire's" seems extraneous... her freckles - this morning crossed - by Easter ash.


4
dust to dust
ashes to ashes...
way of all flesh
--Keith A. SIMMONDS; T & T
Votes:****** Points:00
Comments: I'm hesitant using quotes and expressions unless I can find a new twist in response to the call, the fragment to follow the phrase, or since the quote is so well know line 2 can be used toward that goal, and maybe a little less direct like... ashes to ashes - I visit the tree carved - with our initials


5
Ash Wednesday...
the pheasant in the hills
cries once
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:2-2-1*** Points: 9
Comments: Neat, there's a bible quote or story that says a cock crowed then Jesus dies that this parallels, right? I like the modern Western twist and that the location being in the hill's imply the eerie echo without saying it.


6
bridges burned
the ashes became
my magic carpet
-Reason A. Poteet, USA
Votes:3-1**** Points:5
Comments: 1. Again, a tempting haiku to vote for, but the use of the past tense in line 2, “became” ultimately” canceled my vote. This haiku would be so much better if the 2nd and 3rd line read “the ashes become”/ my magic carpet”.
2. The message is uplift and humorous with the mixed metaphor. The way the metaphor is used seems very Western for haiku. I find metaphor more effective in haiku when done subtly.


7
I love you
till your becoming ash
swear on the holy Wednesday
--sakuo
Votes:****** Points:00
Comments: Romantic. It reads very Western in style and abstract to me. I wonder for line 3 something more concrete and juxtaposed instead.


9
Only a rembrance
from my mother-
a handful of ash
--Vasile Moldovan, Romania
Votes:2***** Points:2
Comments:1. Hmmm. No such word as “rembrance”; the writer probably means “rememberance”! The use of “from” suggests that mother bequeathed some ashes to the survivors, but the poet probably means the ashes are from the cremation of her mother. The verse might be improved by changing “from” to “of”--- “of my mother--”
2. Feels sad and maybe even resentful, neat. Misspelt remembrance. I wonder about something a little less direct in line one like... a lily - from my mother - a handful of ash.


10
campfire ashes --
some embers still
glowing
--Tikkis
Votes:3-5-**** Points:13
Comments: 1. a clear picture of the carelessness of folks perhaps hurrying to get home to convenience of a furnace
2. Although the theme of “ash(es)” was probably selected for its religious significance, nothing in the rules prevents a non-religious interpretation. Ashes are after all ashes--and this haiku conveys one non-religious experience of ashes quite well.
3. like the contrast of ash while still burning embers. I wonder about a more implied relationship. campfire ash - warming my hands - in the pre-dawn.


12
the empty urn
ready his ashes--
a sunny spring day
--John Daleiden; Avondale, AZ
Votes:1-2-**** Points:5
Comments: I'm really interested in the urn not yet being filled, waiting for the ashes. I wanted to read the line 1 & 2 phrase as less direct.


13
cloud of ashes
get out of ashes
phoenix of ashes
--Tatjana Debeljacki
Votes:****** Points:00
Comments: Interesting effect. I wonder if it's not more Western style poety than haiku. What about "rise above ashes" for line 2?


14
flowers on ashes-
juniper smoke
around the cross
--KRZSZTOF KOKOT PL
Votes:****** Points:00
Comments: Nice. The contrast of flowers and ash and the religious connection.


16
reunited
his ashes laid to rest
at her feet
--Mary Davila
Votes:3-***** Points:3
Comments: 1. poignant and touching thought, as much his blessing as hers
2. Nice. Instead of explaining in line 1 I wonder instead about implying with something like, 'fresh soil'


17
crosses of ashes
the old monsignor’s
shaky hands
--Catherine J.S. Lee, USA
Votes:1-2-2*** Points:11
Comments: Nice detail.

Caribbean Kigo Kukai #11

Caribbean Kigo Kukai #11

Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo Number Eleven Kukai

The Kigo is Ashes

Send one haiku which must include the word 'Ashes'

Example:-
fervor of revelery gone
the coolness of ashes
on my forehead
--gillena cox

I read quite recently, an account of ashes in the japanese culture...A story is told about three tea masters who had a magnificent tea room with much valuable equipment. One day the house caught fire and the 3 tea masters rushed in to save what they could. The first thing they saved was the ashes! The point being made with this story is that everything involved in a tea ceremony has been given careful aesthetic attention, even the ashes. In Trinidad and Tobago Ash Wednesday for many christians starts the period of penitence spanning forty week days. How does ashes feature signicifantly in your culture; haiku this in CKK#11
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Deadline for sending entries is...March 10th 2010
Deadline for sending votes is......March 20th 2010

A voting list will be e-mailed to all players

Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Example:-
Haiku#76………3pts
Haiku#34………2pts
Haiku#8………1pt

Comments on poems encouraged, but must be limited to 3 lines
When published votes and comments will be given anonymous listings.

Ballots to be sent to e-mail

A list of haiku and results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai

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March is the anniversary month of CKK revisit CKK#1 Kigo Lent here
much love
gillena

CKK #10 Results

Caribbean Kigo #10 Kukai Results

Players: 1. Keith Simmonds, T&T; 2. Sakuon Nakamura, Japan; 3. Jacek Margolak; Poland; 4. John MacDonald, Scotland; 5. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 6. Vasile Moldovan , Romania; 7. Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 8. Reason A. Poteet; USA; 9. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 10. Karina Klesko, USA; 11. Quentin Clingerman, USA; 12. Magdalena Dale, Poland; 13. Krzysztof Kokot; Poland; 14. Catherine J.S. Lee, Maine ; 15. Rafal Zabratynski, Poland; 16. Tomislav Maretic, Poland;


#3 FIRST PLACE
carnival in Venice -
my shadow puts on
a mask
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:4-3-4*** Points:22
Comments:The most original, least predictable haiku in this month’s Kukai.


#15 SECOND PLACE
carnival season
the condom machine
needs refilling
--Rafal Zabratynski, Poland,
Votes:6-3-2*** Points:18
Comments:this is an anti-AIDS haiku!


#4 & #7 THIRD PLACE
#4
Mardi Gras -
a little dog
wears sunglasses
--John McDonald
Votes:3-5**** Points:13
Comments


#7
carnival in Rio -
girl with a broken leg
watching the dancers
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:3-2-2*** Points:13
Comments



RESULTS CONTINUES


1
sea of revellers
in sound, colour and movement...
greatest show on Earth
--Keith A. SIMMONDS; T & T
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:


2
the floats running
through the fire
love blossoms bloom
--sakuo.
Votes:****** Points:
Comments:


5
carnival monday
the cowboy sways himself
on a clown's shoulder
--Ralf
Votes:1-1**** Points:3
Comments


6
waiting for the Lent...
the most lively colours
invade the Main Street
-- Vasile Moldovan - Romania
Votes:*1**** Points:2
Comments


8
hawker's holiday
kept afloat by Mardi Gras
deluge of doubloons
--Reason A. Poteet
Votes:****** Points:
Comments


9
widowed woman
next door to us
crooning carnival songs
--Tikkis, Finland
Votes:*2**** Points:4
Comments


10
Fat Tuesday --
clouds of whipped cream
over hot pan cakes
--Karina Klesko; USA
Note: shrove Tuesday or fat Tuesday the day before lent , last day before fasting...
traditionally pancakes...
Votes:****** Points:
Comments


11
Optimism smiles
With a syncopated beat
The revelers dance
--Quentin Clingerman
Votes:**1*** Points:3
Comments


12
Venice carnival…
an employee dressed
in a king
--Magdalena Dale
Votes:*3**** Points:6
Comments


13
a night frenzy-
morning...sounds of drums
in my head
--Krzysztof Kokot; Poland
Votes:2-2-1*** Points:9
Comments


14
Carnival weaving a samba through city streets
--Catherine Lee, Maine USA
Votes:2-1-1*** Points:7
Comments


16
a little masquer
frightened by a big one -
death consoles her
--Tomislav Maretic
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments

Caribbean Kigo Kukai #10

Dear haiku friends you are invited to participate in The Caribbean Kigo Tenth Kukai

The Theme is Carnival

Send one haiku which includes this theme

Example:-
the streets teeming
with rhythm and colour
parade of the bands
--gillena cox

In Trinidad and Tobago Carnival time ends on the Tuesday, which is the day before Ash Wednesday


e-mail to

Deadline for sending entries is February 10th 2010
Deadline for sending votes is February 20th 2010

A voting list will be e-mailed to all players

Voting: Votes to be scored using a total of 6pts
Example:-
Haiku#76………3pts
Haiku#34………2pts
Haiku#8………1pt

Comments are encouraged but must be limited to 3 lines
When published votes and comments will be given anonymous listings.
Ballots to be sent to e-mail

A list of haiku and results will be published here at Caribbean Kigo Kukai

much love
gillena

Re: Caribbean Kigo Kukai #9 - an apology

new year's lunch
the sunpatch on the plate
of a belated guest
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND


The haiku above was sent to me from Jacek Margolak - Saturday, January 02, 2010 7:34 AM
yet by my mistake it was not listed, and subsequently not voted in the kukai.
Dear Jacek my apologies.
Please do not let this deter you from future participation

much love
gillena; Kukai Coodinator

Caribbean Kigo #09 Kukai Results

Players: 1. Cindy Tebo, USA; 2. Sakuon Nakamura, Japan; 3. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 4. John Daleiden, USA; 5. Juhani Tikkanen; 6. Ruth Poteet, USA; 7.Keith Simmonds, T&T; 8. Gynith Roberts, USA; 9. Andrzej Dembończyk, Silesia, Poland; 10. Catherine J.S. Lee, Maine, USA; 11. Mary Davila, USA; 12. Quentin Clingerman, USA;



#1; FIRST PLACE
new year's day
the smell of pickled herring
on the cat's breath
--Cindy Tebo
Votes:3-2-4*** ;Points:19
Comments: Great idea of having a hangover and looking for some sour tasting help. But the cat was faster - badluck.



#9 SECOND PLACE
fortune cookies -
the same wisdom
as the year before
--Andrzej Dembończyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:*4-1*** ;Points:11
Comments



#10 #11 THIRD PLACE
10
hoping for the coin
in the cowpeas, ham, and rice –
a new year begins
--Catherine J.S. Lee
Votes:2-1-1*** ;Points:7
Comments: I know that situation - a Chinese type of déjavu ..



11
his fist full
of black-eyed peas
a gull's scream
--Mary Davila
Votes:2-1-1*** ;Points:7
Comments: Somehow dark, but a strong picture.


RESULTS CONTINUES

2
cutting rice cake
in small size
for old couple

お餅切る
小さめサイズ
老夫婦
--Sakuo
Votes:1-1-1*** ;Points:6
Comments



3
saint silvester’s day
this time she prepares
pea purée and pork
 Ralf Bröker
Votes:3-1**** ;Points:5
Comments



4
in the kitchen pot
chittlins boiling boiling boil…
soul food
---John Daleiden, Abondale, AZ
Votes:1***** ;Points:1
Comments



5
New Year’s snow –
the cat caught
another mouse
--Tikkis, Turku, Finland
Votes:2-***** ;Points:2
Comments



6
a silver dime
spooned from the hoppin’ john
New Year’s good luck charm
--Reason A. Poteet
Votes:*3**** ;Points:6
Comments



7
New Year’s Day ~
family fiesta with
pork chops and lentils
--Keith A. Simmonds; T & T
Votes:*1**** ;Points:2
Comments



8
Dawn of a new year
Black eyed peas on the table
Bring good luck all year
--Gynith Roberts
Votes: 1-2**** ;Points:5
Comments



12
Sauerkraut on plate
Best wishes for the New Year
Ate with thanksgiving
--Quentin Clingerman
Votes:1***** ;Points:1
Comments


Kukai Results 1-8; March-October 2009 at Caribbean Kigo