Caribbean Kigo #23 Kukai Results
(comments and votes of the players are anonymously stated)
Players: 1. Patricia Lidia, Romania; 2. Paul David Mena, USA; 3. Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 4. Jacek Margolak, Poland; 5. Garry Eaton; 6. Marleen Hulst, The Netherlands; 7. Tomislav Maretic,Croatia; 8. John Daliden, Phoenix, Arizona in the Sonoran Desert, USA; 9.Quentin Clingerman, USA; 10.Ramona Linke, Germany; 11. John McDonald, Scotland; 12. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 13. Cara Holman, USA; 14. Diane Mayr, USA; 15. Gheorghe Postelnicu, Romania; 16. Sanjukta Asopa, Karnataka, India; 17. Bouwe Brouwer, The Netherlands; 18. Reason A. Poteet, IN, USA; 19. Krzysztof Kokot, Poland; 20. Malgorzata Miksiewicz, Wrocław Poland; 21. Ralf Bröker,Germany; 22. Cezar-Florian Ciobîca,Romania; 23 Magdalena Dale - Romania; 24. Alegria Imperial; Canada
#04 - FIRST PLACE
broken string
my paper kite disappears
in the sun
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:641*** Points:17
Comments
#11 SECOND PLACE
clearing his garage -
our tin-can telephone
the string still connected
John
Votes:251*** Points:15
Comments
#22 THIRD PLACE
antic shop window -
a spider carrying the moon
among guitar strings
-- Cezar-Florin Ciobîca
Votes:322*** Points:13
Comments
RESULTS CONTINUES
1
no strings attached –
spring in triumph
in this tag of war
--Patricia Lidia
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments
2
spring snow --
a sagging string
of Christmas lights
--Paul
Votes:13**** Points:7
Comments
3
grandma counting
a long string of beads ...
Fukushima
--Keith A. SIMMONDS; T & T
Votes:5*1*** Points:8
Comments
5
strings attached
the collection of kites
on the power line
--Garry Eaton; Port Moody, BC, Canada
Votes:21**** Points:4
Comments
6
silver wedding
the string quartets repertoire
of golden oldies
--Marleen Hulst; The Netherlands
Votes:21**** Points:4
Comments:In line 2 an ' is need on quartets--quartet's; a possessive form should have been used. Spelling problems of this sort
obscure intended meaning.
7
sound of a guitar
in the night... a mouse passed
over the string
--Tomislav Maretic
Votes:**1*** Points:3
Comments
8
in the twilight
she weaves her silken strings--
hazy moon
--John Daleiden
Votes:31**** Points:5
Comments
9
Breaking the light string
The kite sails off on its own
Faces full of surprise
--Que
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments
10
tears at Easter
between door handle & milk tooth
a long string
--Ramona Linke, Germany
Votes:231*** Points:11
Comments
12
fluttering string -
the flagpole bombarded
by some mutineers
--Juhani Tikkanen
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments
13
dream catcher -
crafting sweet slumbers
with willow and string
--Cara Holman
Votes:111*** Points:6
Comments
14
paper cranes
bounce from their strings
...aftershock
--Diane
Votes:421*** Points:11
Comments1:A very effective allusion to a current event without resorting to cliche.
Comments2:A meaningful reference to events happening now! An improvement would have been a plural form for "aftershocks".
15
over blossomed orchard
the paraglider's strings
begin whistling
--Gh.POSTELNICU STOPS
Votes:**1*** Points:3
Comments
16
passing shower--
the maestro tunes
his sitar strings
--sanjuktaa, India.
Votes:4*1*** Points:7
Comments:A nice 2 phrase haiku. I especially likes the repeated "s" sounds in each line of the haiku because the sounds reminded me of both the raindrops in the passing shower, and the various and changing tuning sounds of the strings as the maestro progresses with the turning.
17
grandma's box
buttons and threads -
loose ends
--Bouwe
Votes:11**** Points:3
Comments
18
hope's hidden strings
ever more reliable
each breath I take
Reason A. Poteet, IN, USA
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments
19
the one slice of bread;
on the string upon the leg
haggard dog straggler
--Krzysztof Kokot PL
20
willow branches -
the wind playing
on the strings
--Malgorzata Miksiewicz
Votes:411*** Points:9
Comments
21
mother's birthday
a-string's vibration
--Ralf
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments
23
string spring...
birds chirping stopped
by a thunder
--Magdalena Dale - Romania
http://tankadream.blogspot.com/
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments
24
solar eclipse--
his marionettes piroutte
from his strings
--Alegria Imperial; Canada
Votes:1***** Points:2
Comments:For me the use of "his" in line three is confusing; an improvement would the substitution of their for his in this line.
