Tuesday, September 24, 2013

CKK #46 Results


1. None of the comments during the kukai are from the kukai coordinator. Comments and votes of the players are anonymously stated
2. Poems remain the copyright of individual writers

Players: 1. Gheorghe Postelnicu, Romania; 2. John McDonald, Scotland; 3. Jayashree Maniyil, Australia; 4. Arvinder Kaur, India; 5. Sandi Pray USA; 6. Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu, Romania; 7. Diane Mayr, USA; 8. Claudius Gottstein, Germany; 9. Anitha Varma, India; 10. Vinay Leo R.Bangalore, India; 11. Paresh Tiwari, India; 12. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 13. Keith A. Simmonds T & T; 14. Kashinath Karmakar,India; 15. Bill Kenney, US; 6.Kumarendra Mallick , India; 17. Krzysztof Kokot, Poland; 18. Lavana Kray, Romania; 19. Tatjana Debeljacki, Serbia; 20. Marie-Alice Maire, France; 21. Catherine J.S. Lee, USA; Robert Kania, Poland; 23. Pat Geyer, USA; 24. Angie Werren, USA;


FIRST PLACE

4
action film--
my baby's kick
in the sonogram
--Arvinder Kaur,Chandigarh,India
Votes: 173*** Points: 24
Comments: Direct, funny, and "sonogram" in line 3 is a nice twist.


SECOND PLACE

14
dark movie hall-
in my popcorn pack
someone else's hand
--kashinath karmakar(kash poet),India
Votes: 28**** Points: 18
Comments: A more straightforward word order in lines 2-3 would improve this.


THIRD PLACE

5
frames of war -
the color of blood
in black and white
--Sandi Pray USA
Votes: 251*** Points: 15
Comments:


RESULTS CONTINUES

1
PORUMBOIU -
european filmmaker
with big corn vitamins
STOPS
Note:"corn" in romanian is PORUMB, big corn = PORUMBOI.
Votes: ****** Points: 00
Comments:


2
adventures
in light and shadow
...all for a jam-jar
-- JOHN McDONALD EDINBURGH SCOTLAND
Note: (a jam-jar: price of entry to the local flea-pit in the 40's)
Votes: ****** Points: 00
Comments:


3
full moon ...
his eccentricities
on the screen
--Jayashree Maniyil, Melbourne, Australia
Votes: 13**** Points: 07
Comments: Suggests the magnifying effect of cinema. Identifying a specific eccentricity might have made this stronger.


6
outdoor cinema -
storm clouds
gone with the wind
--Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu, Romania
Votes: 4*1*** Points: 07
Comments:


7
lights come up...
popcorn butter stains
on both our pants
--Diane Mayr, Salem, NH USA
Votes: 2***** Points: 02
Comments:


8
peacekeeping force
movie night under
the camo net
--Claudius Gottstein, Borgloh, Germany
Votes: 11**** Points: 03
Comments:The meaning of line 1 deepens as the poem unfolds: the movie as a peacekeeping force.


9
undeveloped roll
in the old camera-
a sepia world
--Anitha Varma Kerala India
Votes: *31**** Points: 09
Comments:


10
photo album —
behind a film of dust
smiles innocence
--Vinay Leo R. Bangalore, India
Votes: 23**** Points: 08
Comments:


11
wilting irises -
I turn up the volume
in an empty house
--Paresh Tiwari India
Votes: 12**** Points: 05
Comments:


12
installing VOD
I try to explain
huckleberry friend
--Ralf Bröker
Votes: **1*** Points: 03
Comments:


13
a film unfolds
on the station of the cross...
agony of Christ
--Keith A. Simmonds T & T
Votes: ****** Points: 00
Comments:


15
the black lips
of the femme fatale
film noir
--Bill Kenney
Votes: 241*** Points: 13
Comments:


16
mad mad mad world --
man wages war to
win peace
--Kumarendra Mallick Hyderabad, India
Votes: ****** Points: 00
Comments:


17
3D glasses –
dinosaurs already occupied
the first rows
--Krzysztof Kokot, Nowy Targ, Poland
Votes: 12**** Points: 05
Comments:


18
season end -
the film star poster
buried in leaves
--Lavana Kray-Iasi-Romania
Votes: 24**** Points: 10
Comments: "Season's end" for line 1. The poster isn't buried, since it's visible; simply "under the leaves" would work


19
in the Old Town
Selling the violets
Indian movie
--Tatjana Debeljacki
Votes: ****** Points: 00
Comments:


20
red carpet -
my life's movie
flashback
-- Marie-Alice MAIRE
Votes: 22**** Points: 06
Comments:


21
nothing but pixels—
those Super 8 home movies
we used to show
--Catherine J.S. Lee Maine, USA
Votes: 11**** Points: 03
Comments:


22
Harvest moon -
Shall We Dance
a Dirty Dancing?
--Robert Kania, Poland
Votes: 12**** Points: 05
Comments:


23
still images
move 'cross the screen...
a critic is born
--Pat
Votes: ****** Points: 00
Comments:


24
blackbirds
in fidgety rows, movie-goers wait
for the lights to dim
--Angie Werren Amelia, OH USA
Votes: 2***** Points: 02
Comments:

3 comments:

  1. CKK welcomes: Dr. Kumarendra Mallick . To view our very first kukai CLICK HERE

    Thanks to all participants for making CKK#46 a success

    much love
    gillena cox; founder/co-ordinator Caribbean Kigo Kukai

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  2. black and white screen
    her hands
    on my palm
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  3. Supani, welcome to CCK, thanks for sharing; i hope you take part in the Otober kukai

    much love

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