Wednesday, November 24, 2010

CKK #19 Results


Caribbean Kigo #19 Kukai Results
(comments and votes of the players are anonymously stated)


Players: 1. Vasile Moldovan, Romania; 2. Gheorghe Postelnicu , Romania; 3. Quentin Clingerman, USA; 4. Patrick Druart, France; 5. John McDonald, Scotland; 6. Juhani Tikkanen, Finland; 7. Oprica Padeanu, Romania; 8. Franklin Magalhaes, Rio de Janeiro; 9. Patricia Lidia, Romania; 10. Marleen Hulst; The Netherlands; 11. karina klesko, USA; 12. Ralf Bröker, Germany; 13. Cara Holman, USA; 14. Keith A. Simmonds, T & T; 15. Jacek Margolak, POLAND; 16. Nakamura Sakuon, Japan; 17. Michael Andrew Obrien, Galway, Ireland; 18. Reason A. Poteet, US, IN; 19. Bouwe Brouwer, The Netherlands; 20. Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland; 21. John Daleiden, Arizona, USA; 22. Magdalena Dale, Romania; 23. Sanjukta Asopa, Karnataka, India; 24. Cezar-Florian Ciobîca, Romania




#10 FIRST PLACE
autumn wreath
the dried sunflower
feeds a blackbird
--Marleen Hulst; The Netherlands
Votes:841*** Points:19
Comments:The notion that the “sunflower displayed in the wreath contributes to the longevity of a blackbird’s life by serving as food emphasizes the cyclic nature of the universe and the life forms found there.



#22 SECOND PLACE
New Year’s dawn…
on the top of the garbage
a Christmas wreath
--Magdalena Dale - Romania
Votes:641*** Points:17
Comments:



#15 THIRD PLACE
father's funeral...
the lily wreath
full of life
--Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Votes:313*** Points:14
Comments:The juxtaposition of the dead (line 1) and the living “lily wreath / full of life” (lines 2-3)is meaningful. However, ironically, the lily used in the wreath, is also destined to the same kind of expiration of life as the “father” in line 1.



RESULTS CONTINUES


1
Jesus' wreath-
purple leaves falling
one by one
 Vasile Moldovan, Romania
Votes:2*1*** Points:5
Comments:



2
upside-down tear
by the crysanthemums wreath
every candle flame
--STOPS
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:



3
Silently the wreath
Displays the season's glory
Abundance of joy
--Quentin Clingerman
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments:


4
As every year
under the mistletoe wreath
the loving kiss
--druart patrick
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:


5
in a swirling wind
a wreath of leaves
settles at her door
-- john
Votes:52**** Points:9
Comments:


6
a child puts his candle
in the middle of
the advent wreath
--Juhani Tikkanen
Votes:2*1*** Points:5
Comments:


7
Ripe wheat-
a wreath of ears for
my mother's soul
--Oprica Padeanu, Romania
Votes:111*** Points:6
Comments:Why “ears” in line 2? Would the word “grains” be an improvement?


8
Christmas again.
Wreath in grandma's door
since last year.
--Franklin Magalhães
Votes:511*** Points:10
Comments:an emdash ( - )at the end of line one would be superior to a . (period).


9
Christmas wreath -
too early to hang,
too late to appologize
--Patricia Lidia, Romania
Votes:3***** Points:3
Comments:Nice juxtaposition of lines 3 & 4. Spelling--Apologize has only one p.


11
Christmas wreath
above the hearth
a butterfly emerges
--karina klesko
Votes:11**** Points:3
Comments:a nice use of the 2nd line as a pivot.


12
roof truss
carpenters brace
a ribboned wreath
--Ralf
Votes:3***** Points:3
Comments:


13
December again…
holiday lights
encircle the wreath
--Cara Holman
Votes:1***** Points:1
Comments:


14
a wide wreath
hanging on the front door...
dreams of Christmas
--Keith A. SIMMONDS; T & T
Votes:****** Points:0
Comments:


16
straw wreathes
decorated happy gates
the sound of New Year's bell
--Sakuo
Votes:*1****Points:2
Comments:Beautifull!


17
although too small
to carry the wreath
he longs for his father
--Michael Andrew; Galway, Ireland
Votes:21**** Points:4
Comments:


18
a victor's wreath
on the teacher's grave
his students still race
--Reason A. Poteet, US, IN
Votes:12**** Points:5
Comments:This “ victor’s wreath” is an unusual tribute to an educator.


19
first frost
under the morning moon
a wreath of leaves
--Bouwe
Votes:62**** Points:10
Comments:a good use of the kigo “first frost”. Line 2 functions nicely as a pivot line. “a wreath of leaves” seems highly unusual to me


20
advent wreath in a hospice -
whether everyone will see
fourth candle flame?
--Andrzej Dembonczyk, Silesia, Poland
Votes:2***** Points:2
Comments:


21
funeral wreath--
cleaning the family graves
of spent blooms
--John Daleiden
Votes:321*** Points:10
Comments:


23
no wreath-
just the golden leaves
cover her grave
--sanjuktaa; Karnataka, India
Votes:12**** Points:5
Comments:


24
armistice -
waiting for my father
with a laurel wreath
--Cezar-Florian Ciobîca
Votes:221*** Points:9
Comments:The ambiguity of what event is inferred in this situation is poignant.


LATE ENTRY (received after voting had already started)

25
wind in the wreath
another Christmas
without her
--Bill


26
back of the bakery
day-old donuts on a wreath
the birds' christmas
--Diane

2 comments:

  1. CKK welcomes Patrick Druart, Patricia Lidia, Michael Andrew

    26 poems were submitted to CKK 19; unfortunately poems 25 and 26 were received when voting had already begun and so were not eligible for votes.

    One player did not send in a vote; and William Kenny, was asked to submit an 'invitee vote' which he did, Thanks again Bill.

    Caribbean Kigo Kukai, has received a Top General Poetry Blogs award presented by Online University [www.onlineuniversity.org/top_poetry_general/]

    This will be the last kukai for 2010; CKK resumes in January 2011; thanks for making
    CKK the huge success that it has turned out to be.
    I wish to invite all CKK players and supporters to an annual event 'The Twelve Days of Christmas from Dec 25 to Jan 6th at my blog Lunch Break
    [http://myblog-lunchbreak.blogspot.com/]

    HAPPY HOLIDAYS TO ALL
    much love
    gillena

    CKK coordinator

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  2. Commentary on Kukai #19's winner has been posted; click on Kudos in the See Also list to read it


    much love
    gillena
    coordinator; Caribbean Kigo Kukai

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