Thursday, April 26, 2018

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POEMS REMAIN THE COPYRIGHT OF INDIVIDUAL WRITERS


Players:
1. Marta Chocilowska, Poland; 2. Michael H. Lester, USA; 3. Anna Cates, USA; 4. Pat Geyer, USA; 5. Bill Kenney, USA; 6. Ana Irina, Romania; 7. Vasile Moldovan, Romania; 8. Martha Magenta, England; 9. Justice Joseph Prah, Ghana; 10. Mark Gilbert; 11. Christine L. Villa, USA; 12. Eufemia Griffo Italy; 13. Ashi Kjær, Denmark; 14. Andrius Luneckas, Lituania; 15. Mercy Ikury, Kenya; 16. Rebecca Sanchez, USA; 17. Marina Bellini, Italy ; 18. Ernesto P. Santiago, Greece; 19. Pasquale Asprea, Italy; 20. Giovanna Restuccia; 21. Cristina Apetrei, Romania; 22. Cezar Florescu, Romania; 23. Henryk Czempiel, Poland; 24. Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy



FIRST PLACE

22
refugee child
in his overcoat pocket
a Disneyland map
--Cezar
VOTES:224*** SCORE:18
COMMENTS: A very moving image


SECOND PLACE

8
deep autumn
the scent of dried lavender
in her apron pocket
--Martha Magenta England, UK
VOTES:712*** SCORE:15
COMMENTS: “dried” and ”apron” may be too much information, but an evocative ku even so.



THIRD PLACE

5
winter sky
full of stars . . .
my empty pockets
--Bill Kenney
Whitestone NY USA
VOTES:431*** SCORE:13
COMMENTS: would have been better …my pockets empty (rather than, my empty pockets.)



RESULTS CONTINUES

1
a visit
the new neighbor's dog
sniffs at my pocket
--Marta Chocilowska, Poland
VOTES:1***** SCORE:01
COMMENTS:


2
a joey
in her kangaroo pocket
Lamaze class
--Michael
VOTES:**1*** SCORE:03
COMMENTS:


3
a sea star
sways in a pocket light . . .
harmonica strains
--Anna Cates, Wilmington, OH. USA
VOTES:****** SCORE:00
COMMENTS:


4
barefoot little boy
jumps over a puddle...
frog in his pocket
--Pat Geyer USA
VOTES:3*1*** SCORE:06
COMMENTS: I am as afraid as curious what he will do with this frog .


6
pocket money -
on the full moon
a few spots
--Ana Drobot (Bucharest, Romania)
VOTES:11**** SCORE:03
COMMENTS: This might have scored higher but for the awkward word order and the unnecessary “full.” I like the avoidance of over-precision in “a few.”


7
before the payday
nothing in my pockets...
only the eastern wind
--Vasile Moldovan, Romania
VOTES:2***** SCORE:02
COMMENTS:


9
jail breaking
the beggar's finger peeps
out of his torn pocket
--Justice Joseph Prah; Ghana
VOTES:****** SCORE:00
COMMENTS:


10
running for the train
warm hamburger
in my pocket
--Mark Gilbert
VOTES:1***** SCORE:01
COMMENTS:


11
not knowing
how I lost him . . .
a hole in my pocket
--Christine L. Villa, USA
VOTES:312*** SCORE:11
COMMENTS:


12
unstitched pockets
all those scars
still open
--Eufemia Griffo Italy
VOTES:411*** SCORE:09
COMMENTS: 1. I won't be surprised if this wins. Love the strong metaphor!
2. A powerful image



13
Once full
Now empty space
My pockets
--Ashi Kjaer
VOTES:**1*** SCORE:03
COMMENTS:


14
valentine's day
in my pocket
two last year chestnuts
--Andrius Luneckas; Vilnius, Lituania
VOTES:11**** SCORE:03
COMMENTS:


15
recently divorced
he pockets his son's picture
and pats the pocket
--I.M
VOTES:****** SCORE:00
COMMENTS:


16
comparing selfies
looking older every year
hands in pocket
© Rebecca Sanchez 2018
VOTES:2***** SCORE:02
COMMENTS:


17
warm breeze
a stone carved by the sea
in the pocket
-- Marina Bellini
VOTES:111*** SCORE:06
COMMENTS: The second “the” could be dispensed with. But the sense of time and space ending in “the pocket” is brilliant.



18
cricket chirps
in my toddler’s pocket
his secret
--Ernesto P. Santiago; Athens, Greece
VOTES:311*** SCORE:08
COMMENTS:


19
her phone number
forgotten in the pocket -
old jeans
--Pasquale Asprea - Italy
VOTES:31**** SCORE:05
COMMENTS:


20
crossing the border
his savings in the hidden pocket -
crescent moon
--Giovanna Restuccia
VOTES:221*** SCORE:09
COMMENTS:


21
sharp crash of thunder
a grasshopper leaps into
the scarecrow’s pocket
--Cristina Apetrei
VOTES:211*** SCORE:07
COMMENTS: beautifully and humorously shown fear of the storm


23
handshake
with fist in the pocket
another armistice
--Henryk Czempiel, Poland
VOTES:11**** SCORE:03
COMMENTS:


24
ice cream shop
the little boy offers to pay
with his best shells
--Shrikaanth
VOTES:231*** SCORE:11
COMMENTS: 1. I vote for this haiku, although it does not contain the word "pocket". I guess is that the boy takes the shells out of his pocket and it is very moving scene.
2. number 24 doesn't have "pocket" in it which should not be included due to not following directions.



A HAPPY POEM IN YOUR POCKET DAY TO EVERYONE
This is our last Poem In Your Pocket Kukai. Next April and continuing , our April Kukai will be in observation of International Haiku Day 17 April

4 comments:

  1. COMMENTS: beautifully and humorously shown fear of the storm relates to haiku 21 :)

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    1. Gillena CoxApril 27, 2018 at 7:26 AM
      i do agree Marta, this is a very fun haiku image 😊 I suppose it can even be called haikai.

      sharp crash of thunder
      straw flies from under
      the scarecrow’s hat
      --gillena

      much love...

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